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DaoistatMDJ
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2020-12-16 14:19

The idea is good, but it has critical flaws: To begin : -in this perfect world there is no industrial espionage, a company can maintain a research monopoly for decades without the government or another company having knowledge. -Even having knowledge of technology, the government does not move to acquire or apply pressure, even though it would have popular support. -In that world contracts are perfect and can even annul human rights or law. These are just a few of the points.

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Bran_Ng
Bran_NgLv4

Maybe the company has been hiding up till that point.

c_novel
c_novelLv11

Minor spoilers: It was stated that the company was not active in the game and VR area before the release. The company might be government owned, have close connections or some agreement. This is never denied or stated. There is atleast one other VR game already released. The main interesting thing in the game is the world itself. By the companies statement it took close to a decade to get that world to the current state. Even if you steal their technology, you still need very powerfull hardware and a lot of time to make your own version. Thus the story has not progressed far enough to even see possible results of espionage.

Marubin_MGD
Marubin_MGDLv3

The first two doesn't even have anything to do with the author's reason of writing this. Adding too much realism doesn't necessarily makes it good and enjoyable but instead becomes an additional baggage to the plot. Why make an over complicated situation if this story is about MC a normal person playing an online game. There are other titles for that thing you're looking for and I personally think the author doesn't need to add corporate espionage thing.

Breuno
BreunoAuthor

Haha yeah, it is already too realistic compared to most other vr novels, especially those that do well. Realism isn't really liked by most. It's niche.

Marubin_MGD:The first two doesn't even have anything to do with the author's reason of writing this. Adding too much realism doesn't necessarily makes it good and enjoyable but instead becomes an additional baggage to the plot. Why make an over complicated situation if this story is about MC a normal person playing an online game. There are other titles for that thing you're looking for and I personally think the author doesn't need to add corporate espionage thing.
SOMMO_ARCANO
SOMMO_ARCANOLv2

I dont think is possible

Bran_Ng:Maybe the company has been hiding up till that point.
ORGEMAMA
ORGEMAMALv14

We learned that the company is government owned.

SOMMO_ARCANO:I dont think is possible
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Breuno
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BookWorm313
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Aeternabilis
AeternabilisLv14

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Awesome_Sauce_9607
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