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2020-07-31 20:01

Fascinating. This is the first Rule 63 story that I'd ever encountered on this site so pardon me for my lack of story critique. Grammar-wise, there's nothing too egregious beyond some lacking commas or incorrect uses of punctuation. Easy fix. Dialogue-wise, it fits the time period it's in, fairly formal and stiff. Prose also flows naturally, complimenting the dialogue.. Good read. Keep on writing👍

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