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miraclefuse
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2020-09-13 22:27

I dropped it early on (about 20 chapters in). ML's personality is so blank that I don't really connect with him, and typical Imperial palace-esque shenanigans are happening without much build-up (understandable, but frustratingly lacking any oomph). Basically a little bland. None of the characters have any dimension.

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Thank you for your honest viewpoint! I've been hoping for someone to point the things I lack on. I'm using this fair review to serve as my measure. I'll work harder to meet this. I know that the story is pacing a slow, but things are just starting beyond 20. But I'm really glad that you've read it up to that point! :D

miraclefuse
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Wishing you the best with the rest of the story! The concept is a definitely intriguing, but I needed more of a hook (whether it was the ML's backstory, or just general worldbuilding and political intrigue) to have kept me attached. Thanks for reading my review :)

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