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Keanu_Eugene
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2020-11-01 12:41

(Review to the point of the license exams) Main character has haki and a devil fruit and trains from the time he is 4 years old with HAKI MASTERS that the author places into the story as one piece references purely for the sake of making the MC stronger only for him to barely be stronger than other students and rarely use his 10 years of training and his massive haki advantage after the entrance exam.MC also never uses his advantage of knowing the plot ever to the point where i literally forget that he even knows what is going to happen.Its like the author made him super smart and strong on paper only for him to barely win any fight and always pass out after the fights.And as smart as he is supposed to be with the intellect of crocodile who took over an entire country and the world government didn't even realise he literally has all the future plot points but doesn't do anything like use any of his tracking sand to place on villains during USJ even tho he went to support department and they expressly made it invisible and lead us to believe it was building to him tracking them with it to avoid the other attacks or him knowing about the attack on the training camp and still managing to get kidnapped or the fact that. In terms of MC abilities, OTHER PEOPLE HAVE HAKI.This makes his conquerors mostly useless to this point in terms of storytelling because haki isn't unique so why even bother to put it in.Armament makes him stronger to brawl but his devilfruit can just augment him if the story needed him to brawl as a logia for some stupid reason and observation is reasonable ability to take but crocodile could control large parts of a country just because it was covered in sad deserts.Sandstorms=Haki for him.Honestly author gave this dude every advantage then wrote some moron of a MC who does all the training but still barely does anything above what main storyline deku does and respond to situations that he has had years to plan for with no tactical planning which he has been developing for years.Also logia 'Mode' is supposed to be a passive ability but here it isn't. ... Story was hard to read and honestly I started skipping whole chapters because MC wasnt doing anything more than a regular sidecharacter for most of them. ALSO IT BECOMES A HAREM AT LIKE CHAPTER 40 FOR NO REASON. The story gets worse the more you think about it as of the AFO final fight chapter which highlighter why the MC sucks so much.Gotta drop this story.Hooefully it gets better later but I don't even care to try.Useless MC is intolerable and boring.

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Crabble
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Thanks

TheViciousVillain
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Ty

Banane64_Yan
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Thanks for the Warning

ArtoriaTheLionKing
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thank you

orangegummy
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Daoist_Dan
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Why did they give everyone haki?

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RandomIsGood
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LordValmar
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I'm not good at reviews but seeing as how this is one of the rare complete stories on here, I felt obligated to try. Firstly, as I said, this is a completed story. For me at least, this was almost unheard of. Seems like every other fanfiction on here gets dropped or infinite "hiatus". So kudos to the author for actually finishing. The english in this story is probably its biggest setback. It does get better but there's a this persistent issue throughout the whole story where the author does not capitalize names. There are also the occasional "autocorrect" errors that are easily to spot, showing the author probably didn't proof read all his chapters. It can be at times a bit confusing following who is talking due to poor structure, also, but this hiccup didn't come up too often for me at least. The author says its his first story and it shows at those moments. The synopsis might also give a slight misunderstanding. At least it did for myself. Given that the MC will be adopting Crocodile's abilities and moniker and that the synopsis specifically says he will only care about making cash and uses quotation on him being a "hero", I was kinda expecting him to be a bit more... gangster I guess? I figured he'd pop in the world around the time of the plot as an ***** Crocodile and proceed to slowly conquer the underworld or something shady like that. But no, its a pretty standard "born in MHA, train, enter UA, interact with the plot" type deal. For the most part he is very much a hero, no quotation needed. He doesn't even do vigilante work. This isn't me complaining, just pointing out. I feel like the goddess granting wishes could had been done a bit better. In a rather common isekai fashion he died early due to some mistake and meets a goddess that grants him a wish. Sorta. The way it handled it was that he was given a roulette roll to determine what world he goes to and a random roll to decide what anime he can choose powers from. He landed MHA for world and One Piece for power and obviously he decided to pick Crocodile. To me I feel like it would had been better to just have those abilities given to him randomly without so much input or choice. Its a small thing, sure, but could make the MC just a tad bit more relatable. Because, seriously, you're given the choice to inherit the abilities and powers of any character from One Piece and you choose Crocodile? Don't get me wrong, from a readers perspective its interesting, and he isn't a BAD choice, but still... it feels like selecting silver tier reward when you could had went gold or platinum. That nit-pick aside, the MC in this is a rather driven and focused individual. From a very early age he has been training martial arts and focusing on being the best him he can be, basically. Which is good. Though, and this can be either a pro or con depending on reader preference, the MC isn't OP. I've somewhat mixed feelings on this. Since to me it seems like the powerscale of One Piece is so much higher than MHA that someone on Crocodiles' level would be able to pummel his enemies. Though I guess he didn't get the One Piece physiology, only the fruit power and haki. Still, that he has a power/skill set from One Piece and has been training vigorously since he was like 6 years old... he isn't quite as powerful as I would expect. On the other hand, he is powerful, its not like he is weak. Just not curb-stomp powerful. So it is nice to see that he actually has challenges now and then and can't just breeze through everything. The story is a harem, which really does feel at times, especially in the later chapters, to be the focus of the story more or less. To it's detriment, I feel. It did a good job building up the MC's "main" relationship with Mina but after harem leaks into the story it just progressively drops in character development. Near the end the author seems to just arbitrarily add members to the harem just for the sake of it. One was even added in the final chapter as a last moment "oh btw also her". Personality wise the MC isn't unbearable, which is a great plus. He isn't obnoxious, arrogant, rude or edgelord. He's a fairly calm and reasonable person and not even particularly lust-crazy since he can and does have platonic relationships with females where he isn't trying to bang them (shock). So as far as harem stories goes, its not that bad. He doesn't act like the typical harem story protag at least. If you're a big fan of Deku, you'll be disappointed that there is some minor Deku-bashing present. I didn't mind this since I actually agreed with a lot of it as I'm not a fan of Deku in general, but some people might be upset by it. The story actually focuses very little on Deku, so if you're looking for that in this story you wont find it. Theres a lot of little cameos and references from other animes in this MHA world too thanks to the goddess. Naruto, One Piece, RWBY, Black Panther and Avatar were the ones I caught so far. Its not really a crossover fic though so no worries if you dont know them. Their involvement in the story is relatively minor and more one-off cameos than anything else. Overall its not a bad story. Though it's not amazing either. Still, for being one of the rare few fanfictions to actually be complete? It's worth a binge read if nothing else.

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