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Baneofthedragon
BaneofthedragonLv54yr
2020-09-27 00:05

My complaint is that considering the mc's early training from the ryozanpaku look alikes, he should be wayyyy stronger and his sand powers are nerfed too much, i mean you said that his grandma's power was tolerance and he had been fed all sorts of poisons and he also got wet alot of times so his weakness should have been neligible unless you used a huge amount like tonnes of water on him so a wet nomu hurting him in my view is trash, if he could be hurt like that even after years of training his tolerance than don't make the tolerance quirk at all instead of nerfing him. And also his sand powers, too nerfed thats all ..

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Smithsonian86_
Smithsonian86_Author

I gave him that weakness for one reason, he overestimates his quirk This was meant to be a nod off to the original crocodile who always understimated his foes because he was a logia but sabaku is different and finds ways to overcome them

Baneofthedragon
BaneofthedragonLv5

I like the novel i really do, it's just that as a self proclaimed critic i find that his fight with mina(though it can be argued she trained better than canon)he was a little nerfed, then came his fight with todoroki, that in my opinion should have been a easy fight for the mc and needles nerfing and last but not least, i have to say this again, his grandma has tolerance quir and mc inherited it, so after his awakeing his mother puts poison in his food and other stuff to build tolerance and you also quoted that he trained his weakness of water, so by the time of USJ he should have had a strong immunity to water, such that to make use of his weakness he'd have to be drenced literally, but a nomu who fell in the water and came out wet just became a huge weakness so i don't get that part. I know it might sound unpleasant since you probably spent so much time writing them but believe me i really support and like this novel and that is exactly why i feel i need to criticize on the points i believe are not consistent and could potentially become plot holes or degradation of quality so this is my honest and sincere opinion and suggestions if you would take them, we all know sandman from spider man, enlarge his fist, legs, or stretch in his elemental forms, catch my drift? Anyway it is a very good novel keep it up

Smithsonian86_:I gave him that weakness for one reason, he overestimates his quirk This was meant to be a nod off to the original crocodile who always understimated his foes because he was a logia but sabaku is different and finds ways to overcome them
Oguda
OgudaLv4

He trained it not like original crock

Smithsonian86_:I gave him that weakness for one reason, he overestimates his quirk This was meant to be a nod off to the original crocodile who always understimated his foes because he was a logia but sabaku is different and finds ways to overcome them
PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

True. The nerf really ****ed up the novel

ReviewBrah
ReviewBrahLv11

so all this water training for years gone to poof? Better author not even mention the water training then.

Oguda:He trained it not like original crock
Humbuub
HumbuubLv4

wouldn't it be closer to Gaara's powers than Crocodile's? People underestimate One Piece DFs way too much, that any fruit could easily solo other anime verse. Aside from DBZ series or Togashi's.

Smithsonian86_:I gave him that weakness for one reason, he overestimates his quirk This was meant to be a nod off to the original crocodile who always understimated his foes because he was a logia but sabaku is different and finds ways to overcome them
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LordValmar
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I'm not good at reviews but seeing as how this is one of the rare complete stories on here, I felt obligated to try. Firstly, as I said, this is a completed story. For me at least, this was almost unheard of. Seems like every other fanfiction on here gets dropped or infinite "hiatus". So kudos to the author for actually finishing. The english in this story is probably its biggest setback. It does get better but there's a this persistent issue throughout the whole story where the author does not capitalize names. There are also the occasional "autocorrect" errors that are easily to spot, showing the author probably didn't proof read all his chapters. It can be at times a bit confusing following who is talking due to poor structure, also, but this hiccup didn't come up too often for me at least. The author says its his first story and it shows at those moments. The synopsis might also give a slight misunderstanding. At least it did for myself. Given that the MC will be adopting Crocodile's abilities and moniker and that the synopsis specifically says he will only care about making cash and uses quotation on him being a "hero", I was kinda expecting him to be a bit more... gangster I guess? I figured he'd pop in the world around the time of the plot as an ***** Crocodile and proceed to slowly conquer the underworld or something shady like that. But no, its a pretty standard "born in MHA, train, enter UA, interact with the plot" type deal. For the most part he is very much a hero, no quotation needed. He doesn't even do vigilante work. This isn't me complaining, just pointing out. I feel like the goddess granting wishes could had been done a bit better. In a rather common isekai fashion he died early due to some mistake and meets a goddess that grants him a wish. Sorta. The way it handled it was that he was given a roulette roll to determine what world he goes to and a random roll to decide what anime he can choose powers from. He landed MHA for world and One Piece for power and obviously he decided to pick Crocodile. To me I feel like it would had been better to just have those abilities given to him randomly without so much input or choice. Its a small thing, sure, but could make the MC just a tad bit more relatable. Because, seriously, you're given the choice to inherit the abilities and powers of any character from One Piece and you choose Crocodile? Don't get me wrong, from a readers perspective its interesting, and he isn't a BAD choice, but still... it feels like selecting silver tier reward when you could had went gold or platinum. That nit-pick aside, the MC in this is a rather driven and focused individual. From a very early age he has been training martial arts and focusing on being the best him he can be, basically. Which is good. Though, and this can be either a pro or con depending on reader preference, the MC isn't OP. I've somewhat mixed feelings on this. Since to me it seems like the powerscale of One Piece is so much higher than MHA that someone on Crocodiles' level would be able to pummel his enemies. Though I guess he didn't get the One Piece physiology, only the fruit power and haki. Still, that he has a power/skill set from One Piece and has been training vigorously since he was like 6 years old... he isn't quite as powerful as I would expect. On the other hand, he is powerful, its not like he is weak. Just not curb-stomp powerful. So it is nice to see that he actually has challenges now and then and can't just breeze through everything. The story is a harem, which really does feel at times, especially in the later chapters, to be the focus of the story more or less. To it's detriment, I feel. It did a good job building up the MC's "main" relationship with Mina but after harem leaks into the story it just progressively drops in character development. Near the end the author seems to just arbitrarily add members to the harem just for the sake of it. One was even added in the final chapter as a last moment "oh btw also her". Personality wise the MC isn't unbearable, which is a great plus. He isn't obnoxious, arrogant, rude or edgelord. He's a fairly calm and reasonable person and not even particularly lust-crazy since he can and does have platonic relationships with females where he isn't trying to bang them (shock). So as far as harem stories goes, its not that bad. He doesn't act like the typical harem story protag at least. If you're a big fan of Deku, you'll be disappointed that there is some minor Deku-bashing present. I didn't mind this since I actually agreed with a lot of it as I'm not a fan of Deku in general, but some people might be upset by it. The story actually focuses very little on Deku, so if you're looking for that in this story you wont find it. Theres a lot of little cameos and references from other animes in this MHA world too thanks to the goddess. Naruto, One Piece, RWBY, Black Panther and Avatar were the ones I caught so far. Its not really a crossover fic though so no worries if you dont know them. Their involvement in the story is relatively minor and more one-off cameos than anything else. Overall its not a bad story. Though it's not amazing either. Still, for being one of the rare few fanfictions to actually be complete? It's worth a binge read if nothing else.

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