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SquareGoat
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2020-07-25 11:20

As I read further, the lore of the continent grows deeper. The writing lets you imagine the world. Though it does take time to understand all the nuances, that would only mean that the story is indeed interesting. Totally recommend.

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Thanks so much for reading! :D

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tuba_san
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As a part of my new honest review swap policy, I will not hold back. The author really knows how to establish the plot. The well-timed flashback gives the reader not only an insight on the powers of MC but also informs of them of the MCs family and the political conditions between major factions. And as the story progresses we keep getting more tidbits about the power of different groups of people. We even get to know about the power struggle between different factions. The story is written in first person view but there aren't any elements of roleplay-esque writing. It's actually very smooth, although in a few places I think there could have been a more interesting way of describing the MCs actions. Because too many repetitive words just make the descriptions clunky and lengthy. In some places its not possible to remove these lengthy descriptions but in places where they can be avoided, I'd recommend the author to avoid them. There are too many new things in the novel. Just in the first 3-4 chapters there is an overwhelming amount of information. But without this information the reader wouldn't know anything. So it's necessary to keep this information here. But I think it's very likely that readers can't absorb all this information. So I'd recommend the author to reinforce some of it in the later chapters when the basic background has been set. And also to write an auxiliary chapter focusing on what powers different groups of people possess. And a separate auxillary chapter mentioning the different factions and giving their most basic views towards each other. The grammar is very good. But there are some errors in there. I'd recommend for the author to review the first few chapters again and correct whatever they can find because I don't think these errors are there because of lack of skill. I think they are just mistakes. Coming back to old chapters and reading them with a clear mind gives an author a better chance to spot mistakes in grammar or word usage.

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