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Crazy_Cronie_1
Crazy_Cronie_1Lv54yr
2021-03-23 15:45

heyo crazy cronie here, review on 21/03/2021 @chap230 (released chap till date: 340) review divided in: Short review Long review IMO Ratings Conclusion Warning (includes spoilers) short review: An original plot with a bad Harem story. Okayish world building with almost zero tension. long review: pros: 1) A complete original concept! Atleast to me this was the first time I ever read something like this. Well there are novels which have similar basics but this story is different from those things. 2) The world building is okayish. The power levels are clearly explained for each and every world. Different world, different power systems, different stage names. And with the plot that author is trying to make I know this ain't gonna be easy. But author could have worked more, but then again this novel is just around 20% completed I guess so we can expect more. *SPOILER (not really)* [The same thing, aiming for immortality, though not mentioned yet, but yeah that is where the novel is heading.... But then again almost all the novels have similar goals] 3) I am a harem supporter so yeah that's a plus from me. (Though I hate to say it, without harem this novel would have been much better. Contradictory? Can't help it...) 4) The story is surprisingly addicting. You might start to get bored but you can't leave this novel midpoint and would want to read more and more... cons: 1) Almost zero character depth. Almost all the girls fall in love with MC at first sight. Well at first sight might be a little much but yeah it doesn't even take few chaps for them to fall for MC. And surprisingly no girls are against it. 2) This is a light hearted novel. There is almost no tension. At least I never felt any tension. You know everything is gonna be ok at the end. 3) You can't feel much emotions from the side characters or Harem. Except for blush of girls and sometimes little sadness if girls when mc leaves them. This is 1st POV so yeah don't expect other people views. 4) all girls are super beauties, this is a harem so you can expect it... But why all the girls blush everytime MC make some move against them. Not any bold girls out there? Would love to have more types of girls. 5) Harem: yeah i came mainly for Harem so i added it as cons but this novel would have been better without Harem, atleast that is what I felt... 6) [Not really a CONS] Plot armor, this novel is full of plot armor but again that doesn't really matter since almost all novels have plot armors. But there are really many things done for plot convenience. IMO: - A little more romance would have been better... Well I came here after reading your stealing spree... So yeah author- you can guess why I wanted more Romance. - And hey just my opinion but why don't you add someone's opinion in some bonus chaps, like others pov as a side chap, I think readers might love it. Well just my opinion so yeah you can ignore it... RATINGS: writing: 7.5/10 update: 9/10 plot: 8/10 characters: 7.5/10 pacing: 7.5/10 dialogues: 7/10 entertainment: 7/10 OVERALL: 3.8/5 Conclusion: This is a good time pass. If you can bear starting 20 or so chapters where I found MC a little annoying then yeah this is a good read. A 4 from me instead of 3.5 in the rating since i am biased xD. WARNING: *SPOILER (not exactly)* - MC is somewhere between hero and anti hero, consciously or subconsciously & due to various circumstances mostly leaning towards hero... Sometimes he is cold and badass tho, an inconsistent personality which I actually like it.... GIF: Chandler from Friends because he is the best

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Dyrem
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LollypopChainsaw
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Daoist21616161
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