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Cyan_Star
Cyan_StarLv33yr
2021-07-24 07:31

I have currently read up to chapter 565. This review will contain spoilers but I recommend people to keep reading because the entire story pretty much gets destroyed around chapter 500; and I wouldn't want someone to waste his time reading up to that point. Up until around chapter 500 this story was one of my favorite books on this site; the characters were interesting and the concept of having 2 main characters was extremely unique and entertaining. Unfortunately, for some reason the author decided to do the worst possible mistake he could have done, kill off 90% of the characters and story-lines. After introducing and developing many characters and storylines into the book, the author has decided to cut them all of all together by literally destroying the planet on which the story took place. To me it seemed like the author didn't like what he built up to that point and thus decided to completely restart the entire plot line, leaving behind many unfinished side plots, and characters who were introduced but not properly developed. To make things worse, after this "plot twist" took place, the main characters of the story who remained alive didn't show any signs of grief that should have taken place considering almost everyone they ever loved had died. Considering I had a truly loved this book before the major "plot twist" took place, I implore the author to please explain why he decided to make such a unreasonable change to the story. Thank you for reading this review, and sorry for any grammar or spelling mistakes that might have been in it as English isn't my first language.

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Suiyan
SuiyanAuthor

After many inquires with the readers on discord and at the chapters' comments, I made a pool to see if they wanted that part changed, and the change party won. You might want to take a look again at 547 and 548.

SaintStacker
SaintStackerLv14

Can I have the discord link please?

Suiyan:After many inquires with the readers on discord and at the chapters' comments, I made a pool to see if they wanted that part changed, and the change party won. You might want to take a look again at 547 and 548.
Suiyan
SuiyanAuthor

It should always be in the Author's thoughts... '-'

SaintStacker:Can I have the discord link please?
Idiosyncratic
IdiosyncraticLv15

Thanks for taking the bullet reading this so i dont have to.

Ardenleigh
ArdenleighLv14

sadly i didnt read this beforehand and got hit

Idiosyncratic:Thanks for taking the bullet reading this so i dont have to.
Evadz
EvadzLv14

so did the author changed the plot? or did he still push through killing everyone ?

Evadz
EvadzLv14

so did you already changed the plot? or did you push through killing everyone?

Suiyan:After many inquires with the readers on discord and at the chapters' comments, I made a pool to see if they wanted that part changed, and the change party won. You might want to take a look again at 547 and 548.
Suiyan
SuiyanAuthor

It changed the fate of the planet. However, the twins didn't know about it when they arrived at the Zasfin's planet. There are already chapters that talk about it in the future, though.

Evadz:so did you already changed the plot? or did you push through killing everyone?
DaoistZWaClB
DaoistZWaClBLv1

Spoil me is everybody really dead or do they come back later

Suiyan:After many inquires with the readers on discord and at the chapters' comments, I made a pool to see if they wanted that part changed, and the change party won. You might want to take a look again at 547 and 548.
Dragon912
Dragon912Lv3

Even tho I had faults wit the story I still found it enjoyable, but the way u went about writing how the characters would act after literally seeing everyone they love just get blown up is mildly speaking terrible. It could have been done way better I literally had to reread the chapter because the part where the mcs’ actually care is like a couple sentences. And then on top of that for like the next 7 chapters nobody is phased mala is still on jokes, qia and calina don’t care, and rean the one who’s all about life doesn’t either. like u could have tried to introduce a heavier tone to the story pull some against the gods stuff but no full factory reset. I just read to the planet stuff and was like oh now this is gonna be a revenge story no more play time and nope still everybody having a jolly time 7 chaps after

Suiyan:After many inquires with the readers on discord and at the chapters' comments, I made a pool to see if they wanted that part changed, and the change party won. You might want to take a look again at 547 and 548.
Dragon912
Dragon912Lv3

Kinda curious why did u write the twins and their gangs response to everyone dying like that. Like was it for the plot? Did u forget? Or do u address the situation in later chapters

Suiyan:It changed the fate of the planet. However, the twins didn't know about it when they arrived at the Zasfin's planet. There are already chapters that talk about it in the future, though.
Daniel_Faria
Daniel_FariaLv1

The same here, lasy writing.

Antilliaantje
AntilliaantjeLv4

i stopped reading after their planet got destroyed cause that was next level BS was my fav novel to read aswell

Lv1

after the destruction of the planet, I continued to read. and I'm not disappointed, and there are explanations. not all people on this planet are "totally" dead. it's a shame to stop reading for if can. there are however many novel / manga which have destroyed planets with a huge massacre etc... its remains of the good novels. it's my opinion.

Antilliaantje:i stopped reading after their planet got destroyed cause that was next level BS was my fav novel to read aswell
MrTurnt
MrTurntLv15

Why can’t you just answer the question uestion what is the discord link you did the same with the summary it’s annoying and cocky not funny

Suiyan:It should always be in the Author's thoughts... '-'
Quietquil
QuietquilLv15

I believe that links get removed by webnovel eventually when they are in the comments.

MrTurnt:Why can’t you just answer the question uestion what is the discord link you did the same with the summary it’s annoying and cocky not funny
MrTurnt
MrTurntLv15

Some authors put it in the author notes section or he could easily just put it on his profile like other authors do

Quietquil:I believe that links get removed by webnovel eventually when they are in the comments.
Quietquil
QuietquilLv15

I haven't read this one, but he literally says that it's in the author's thoughts/notes.

MrTurnt:Some authors put it in the author notes section or he could easily just put it on his profile like other authors do
KingQue2005
KingQue2005Lv13

dude... authors thoughts is where he left the link🤣🤣 at the end of every chapter, there's an "authors thoughts" section

MrTurnt:Why can’t you just answer the question uestion what is the discord link you did the same with the summary it’s annoying and cocky not funny
Afreen_Arif
Afreen_ArifLv1

where is the system

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