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2021-01-17 02:53

Everything is good but the MCs. Basically their interaction is meant to be funny but it isn't at all. It's was funny at the start but until when are we supposed to find their bratty dispute funny, One is god knows how old he is and the other is more than 30 years old, and they can't get over their first misunderstanding, They keep arguing and fighting with each other like some snotty toddlers.

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Cyan_Star
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I have currently read up to chapter 565. This review will contain spoilers but I recommend people to keep reading because the entire story pretty much gets destroyed around chapter 500; and I wouldn't want someone to waste his time reading up to that point. Up until around chapter 500 this story was one of my favorite books on this site; the characters were interesting and the concept of having 2 main characters was extremely unique and entertaining. Unfortunately, for some reason the author decided to do the worst possible mistake he could have done, kill off 90% of the characters and story-lines. After introducing and developing many characters and storylines into the book, the author has decided to cut them all of all together by literally destroying the planet on which the story took place. To me it seemed like the author didn't like what he built up to that point and thus decided to completely restart the entire plot line, leaving behind many unfinished side plots, and characters who were introduced but not properly developed. To make things worse, after this "plot twist" took place, the main characters of the story who remained alive didn't show any signs of grief that should have taken place considering almost everyone they ever loved had died. Considering I had a truly loved this book before the major "plot twist" took place, I implore the author to please explain why he decided to make such a unreasonable change to the story. Thank you for reading this review, and sorry for any grammar or spelling mistakes that might have been in it as English isn't my first language.

Noire_Nova
Noire_NovaLv12

Here I am, waiting for the next release, and writing this review in the meantime. I’ve decided to be succinct, so here it goes. In terms of writing quality, it is not bad. Mediocre or even slightly above average. Compared to other novels I read on this site, prior to the creation of my account, it fares quite well, but not so well that it stands out. There are sentence structuring errors here and there and incorrect spellings for certain words/terms which slightly draws away from the experience. Not by much, but for a neophyte grammar critique, such as myself, the effects are significant. In terms of consistency in updating, I can’t really comment much since I have been binge-reading up until this point, but over the past few days, I don’t think there have been any changes, although you are free to correct me if I am wrong. I have also not found any indication of the author’s update schedule or anything similar to estimate how many updates they are planning to make per week, which is fine, since some authors don’t operate on a strict schedule, but for me, I don’t find it particularly reassuring to not know how many chapters I should expect. The story development and characters are by far the key elements here. They outshine the majority of the decent novels I’ve read in the past few months, even encouraging me to create this account for the sole purpose of reading it. Both the plot and characters are unique and intriguing, the latter even more so. The experimentation of the dual-protagonist system is, in my eyes, a significant success on quite a few levels. The inter-personal dynamics were also highly well done. Especially in regards to the key characters and the main duo themselves. Their decisions throughout the story are logical and more or less realistic, or at least in relation to a majority of other novels (I won’t mention any names) that allow their characters to go on multiple nonsensical jumps in logic to arrive at a certain outcome. Some might argue that there are too many time-skips in the beginning chapters and I will have to say that I partially agree. While I find it reasonable to skip over their infancy, the segment regarding the separation from the protagonists’ home town, for example, was done way too abruptly and glossed over in a few sentences. The separation felt far too abrupt, even for me, considering the presence of Rean and his ‘filial’ sentiments. That connects to the topic of the narrative’s world building. I can’t say the world building is average, per se, but it certainly isn’t top-grade, in my opinion. Of course, it is still leaps and bounds ahead of most other cultivation-type novels, but I feel that even taking into account the ignorance of the twins and their non-existent information network, the world seems a pinch too shallow in my eyes. Also, I feel the need to applaud the author for not developing any form of romance. Thank you for that. Really, I mean it. Though, as soon as any semblance of romance shows it’s disgusting face, I will be forced to drop this series, unfortunately. I am sick and tired of romance. It’s like a drug. You get a fleeting high when you start to use it, but then with continued exposure to it, not only do you become immune to it, it starts to become a poison for your mind and body. At least, that’s what I have found out. Overall, it is a great novel, but for whatever reason, it seems to be overshadowed by the authors more prominent work ‘Is that a Wisp?’, which I have not yet read, unfortunately. The pacing is great, and the balance between high-tension scenes and more casual scenes are very well done. The author has managed to find success where many promising others have found naught but failure. In any case, I do hope for updates sooner rather than later. Those two are very interesting to observe.

RestingTree
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The Writing Quality is 5 Stars based off the average webnovel, with the Stability of Updates being very good at time of review. Im mentioning this all before because what im going to say is me hating on the story a bit. I dont think the concept was as well executed as it could be, or maybe its just my own interpretation of what I read. The story starts off great, but there seems to be so much filler it dulls the mind, and one of the MC's being this litteral god of weaponry who can create new techniques within a week, makes you want to see the other MC's (Rean's) specialty. And by 64 hes a fuckin blacksmith, now dont get me wrong, I love blacksmithing novels, but to be fair Ive only ever found two. Blacksmithing can be made cool, but it seems that by the time of mid-story, the author just didnt care about making Rean anything special. I mean he has the light element, while Roan has the dark element. There twins, when I read these details I was thinking, " Oh thats so badass, theyre gonna have this connection of hate-portrayal (from what I could see by there personalities twoards another) where they actually enjoy eachothers company, but theyll never say that. Rean will be a master healer who benefits the tribe by supporting and giving ideas, while Roan is this master of combat who knows all weapons " Sure thats a bit dramaticized, but Roan does end up being like that, he is a badass kid who knows how to beat people above his realm of cultivation, he knows every weapon in the universe, he makes techniques when hes bored and cultivates hard. What does rean do? Makes fuckin low-quality steel and sells it off, then the next chapter we see Roan hinting to him to try and learn how to use the light element sense he collects it faster than Roan so he should master something of his own instead of relying on Roan, the **** does he do, he makes a god damn light saber. I dont think Rean is especially stupid, I just believe the author is making him retarded. Sorry for the bad grammar and the swear at the end, but this is just so sad to see such a great concept unexplored.

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