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Elder
ElderLv114yr
2020-06-23 02:45

Terrible language, and stupid mc. But the starting chapters ok .............................................................................

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The_High_Father
The_High_FatherAuthor

Do you even read all the chapters?

RUE_12
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XD the MC missed up once when he was 10 and the grammar is better than average, but that chapter release tho is amazing

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jaevi
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Writing Quality [3] - I don't think I need to explain why. I see some grammatical errors and wrong use of commas. Not to mention that the Author capitalizes words in the middle of sentences that aren't meant to be capitalized, while he doesn't capitalized the ones meant to be. Stability of Updating [4] - I can't say it was very fast, but it wasn't exactly slow either, so good job I guess? Story Development [2] - Besides the main plot of the canon, the personal ones aren't good at all. I'd say below average or even just average itself. It's just basically the MC being stupid and doing idiotic things that the author tries to justify himself in the paragraph comments as I observed. Character Design [2] - What else can I say about the main character? Oh I know, a hypocrite murderer with so called "morals." Although the beginning of the story was confusing, it was quite apparent that he killed the wife of his sister's murderer who was INNOCENT and killed his bullies as well as the politician himself which is quite understandable considering his situation. But then when Gilgamesh wanted to kill innocent people, he acts like a hypocrite and tries to reason with him that they were innocent? Spoke like a true hypocrite. He acts as if he's meant to save the world and condemns evil but the real one is him. World Background [4] - World background, there's really nothing much to say about this considering that it was a bit detailed but there are some pretty stupid things too but the author does miss some things. Overall Thoughts - Hands down, one of the worst Fate Fanfic I've read, if not the worst. I've seen a lot of worse ones with worse attitude and more grammatical errors, but this won the spot as the first mainly because of the author and the main character. First lets focus on the MC. The beginning chapter showed the backstory for him and how he ended up reincarnating. What kind of parents or sibling would let a 12 year old girl buy groceries at night?? He wasn't even responsible enough to do it himself, and he should have expected this to happen, maybe even something worse might happen and the sister gets kidnapped and used for child trafficking or worse. Then we move on to his hypocrisy where he kills the politician's wife who killed his sister. There was no statement that she wasn't innocent, and he just suddenly barged into their home and knocked their daughter and killed the wife. Understandably he kills his bullies and the politician himself, but why did he kill the innocent wife? Maybe because he was mentally unstable, but then we move on to the scene where Gilgamesh wants to kill innocent people and the MC tries to "reason" with him since they're so innocent. What hypocrisy, the author stated to me in a paragraph comment that he did that because it was connected to the MC and he didn't want that to happen. So does that mean that the innocent woman he murdered wasn't connected? He even acts so conceited and nothing like a psychopathic murderer that he is in his past life. He just became obviously stupid to the point that he doesn't even use his statistical points to fight Gilgamesh which led to Medea's death. And then like an average-joe of a main character he is, he swears revenge and swears an oath to the nine heavens to take his revenge! (Jk lol) Then we get to the point where he rescues Sakura and is apparently disgusted by the worms. He kills the person who adopted her which was nice but then he discovers more of those worms and decides to keep them because it might help him. Hypocrisy to the max am I right? MC: Wow the worms are so disgusting, I hope Sakura is still virgin. 5 mins later. MC: Wow this looks disgusting, I'll use it. Also he's so cringe with the "I, Victor von Doom" thing like wtf lmao. I'm already thinking if the author himself is a chuunibyou lol. The author wasn't good because he doesn't even explain things in the story and does illogical things as he explains instead in comments lol.

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