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jhsilver
jhsilverLv124yr
2020-08-26 07:42

I don't know what to tell you it's not bad it was just Boring. There were moments that I enjoyed but you spend too much time during his childhood and took 68 chapters to finally do a time skip but by then I had lost too much interest to continue. I might pick this back up when there is more chapter It might get better like I said not bad just boring. Question do you plan to have your MC travel to different worlds or to some upper realm?

One Piece: The eldest saiyan brother.

VastoHeaven
4.3
163 Chs

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VastoHeaven
VastoHeavenAuthor

Thanks for your sincere review friend. Sorry you found this boring though 😅 And will I make him go to some upper level and other worlds ? Definitely 😊👍

4yr
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ViciousHandler
ViciousHandlerLv5

I agree, its not bad just boring. i see lots of potential but there seems to be a lot of nonsense that had nothing to do with Main storyline.

4yr
21
WebReaderPub
WebReaderPubLv14

this story have world traveling?

VastoHeaven:Thanks for your sincere review friend. Sorry you found this boring though 😅 And will I make him go to some upper level and other worlds ? Definitely 😊👍
4yr
2
ViolGrande_69
ViolGrande_69Lv1

I never knew why but I always hate the fact where the MC just goes to another world... like... I don't know why tho...

VastoHeaven:Thanks for your sincere review friend. Sorry you found this boring though 😅 And will I make him go to some upper level and other worlds ? Definitely 😊👍
3yr
7
ray_rose
ray_roseLv15

i mean it makes sense if the author sets it up right but ya if its random then its tetarded….most authors drop a couple chapters after new world anyways so it would make more sense to just end the story, been awhile since ive read a completed story

ViolGrande_69:I never knew why but I always hate the fact where the MC just goes to another world... like... I don't know why tho...
3yr
6
Cloudy03
Cloudy03Lv1

Isn't that better it be longer the more enjoyable

3yr
Varun_Mohunah
Varun_MohunahLv14

Not if he drops the book after a couple of chapters.

Cloudy03:Isn't that better it be longer the more enjoyable
3yr
1
Tunic01
Tunic01Lv15

I mean..... He went to another world in the first place, why does it not make sense to go to another?

ViolGrande_69:I never knew why but I always hate the fact where the MC just goes to another world... like... I don't know why tho...
3yr
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VastoHeaven
VastoHeavenAuthor

Ahem I decided to become a shameless author too. Anyway you have to know before you start reading that well it's my first bookmaking so know that my plot is maybe bad or even nonexistent even.. (for now) 'cause I'm really bad at setting a plot... My OC will be an entirely different Saiyan made up by me, and will clearly not respect DBZ logic and laws (it's a fanfic so...). Also the pace is terribly long too, so if you want to read a quick one, well it's not here...yeah... Anyway, if you have anything to say about the book and all that, just comment or do a review, good or bad I don't really care much about it... 🖖✌

4yr

PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

I am the exp of my Holy Scripture Review. Webnovel is my body, exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless reviews. Unknown to sleep, nor known to reality. I have withstood Cliff-Kun to create many reviews. Yet, these hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray ... Unlimited Exp Works!

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Kojikazz22
Kojikazz22Lv13

I don't know why I started reading this but It's as bad as shiet and as a bad case of boredom I continued reading shiet I'm starring to hate this fanfic It's not reincarnated one so why bother reading It's too much like Saiyan but it's too badly done There are too much I hate about this fanfic

4yr
Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

Writing Quality - 2 Stars Story Development - 1 Star Character Design - 1 Star Updating Stability - 3 Star World Background - 2 Star Edit : The thing I hate the most about this Fanfic is the fact that you make him an emotional/ innocent Saiyan that goes around The " holyland ", the most cursed place in the World of One Piece, expecting him to get angry at the WG or the CD because of how they treat them as Humans, fishmen, etc (basically all living things) " slaves " but well....we get this ! Honestly, the Mc is pathetic in his own right . He only mentioned it at the beginning but basically I hoped for more, I mean ....he isn't a Saiyan for nothing . they act with their emotions and don't care If their opponent is stronger then them . If they want to do something then are able to .( DragonBall law!) also, I Think you Made Saiyans way weaker then they orginaly are !

4yr
Plaxa
PlaxaLv5

41 chapters and nothing.....literally nothing...ufff.... waste of time....:( 140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140

4yr
Grenhaer
GrenhaerLv4

(rag) (the most pathetic main character I have seen) (according to him, he does not mind being spat on) the author showed how pathetic he is in the first 3 chapters.

4yr
PUJIT_FADTE_9415
PUJIT_FADTE_9415Lv3

DUDE DONT DROP IT,ITS REALLY A GOOD ONE AND HOPE YOU WILL CONTINUE (7CHPS/WEEK JUST A SUGGESTION) NEW CHAPTERS PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEE 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

4yr
Roronoa_Borsalino
Roronoa_BorsalinoLv14

(👍≧∇≦)👍 ...

4yr
ViciousHandler
ViciousHandlerLv5

Story line is oKay. chapter 60-85 are basically nonsense filler Garbage. story development is like snail slow and there is like zero excitement at all. nothing brilliant, comically funny or Wowing about. kinda dull. lots of potential but seem author does not know how to Polish the story.

4yr
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