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2020-06-02 12:24

Interesting premise!! I really want to know what happens next. I especially liked the build-up of the first chapter. I think the dialogue could flow better. It was a little choppy and strange, and a bit too plot convenient. The men suddenly start making these radiation conjectures out of nowhere. Maybe you can lead up to it (such as, why did they think it was radiation? How do the corpses look like? Did they do a study on it? Evidence? etc). I hope this review helps you out a little! Good job!

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