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2023-06-19 12:05

So I just dived in the first few chapters and I can see why this story is so popular. The writing is excellent, the updates are consistently, the story development is great, characters are awesome, and world background is good enough for this sort of tale. The only thing I could say, is I'd like a bit more visual description in terms of the setting and the background. I like to know how the buildings, outside, and that sort of stuff looks. I like to know more about how each person looks. Sometimes it is nice to even get down the smells someone takes in though I myself don't describe smells as much as I'd like to. But in this case since I'm in a good mood and this story shines well over most of what I see, I'll make an exception and give it 5 stars. Author, I welcome you to check out my original story "Avatar: Macai's Journey". I'd love to see what your views on it would be.

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Thanks for the warm review. I'm grateful and will definitely read your book.

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