Review Detail of Jlairu in Dysfunctional - An Assassin's Guide to Reincarnating in Another World
Review detail
In short 5/5 I can't say much more without ranting, but since I have to write... Summary I really enjoy reading this story, so I gave it a well deserved 5/5 overall although you might think differently, namely because I found myself really far too high on this story. Characters 5/5 The main character to me is perfect, perhaps because I found a freakishly amount of similarities between myself and the main character, though I haven't been an assassin or tortured our lifestyles were pretty similar. Note that other characters may not be as developed. To describe I'd say the main character would be a plain shape with lots of edges and sides while others are simple shapes given colour by the development of the story. Right now the author made a pretty big event happen if it drags Story Development 5/5 It cant be said to be completely perfect, but close enough. While reading it felt like nice smooth well thought out transitions. However looking at a whole I get the feel that it was written with some urgency of some sort, I'm not complaining however its like running and adrenaline. You burn out. Right now I have to say as a reader relaxing would be nice for a little while, before urgent matters arise once more. That's it for my review world and story development goes should go hand in hand and stability of updates isn't worth complaining about. Quality over quantity any day of the week for me. Far too many annoying stuff that drags the same concept for chapters. To author, I researched a bit and found that the mc anima immortal jellyfish can actually revert back to its beginning stage of life will the mc get something similar, or does he have it? Oh and I know cats have short lifespans will cat girl die of age quickly? Will they start a new again? Is it possible to gain parts of your anima to grow ( become more like the animal) like the mc hair becomes tentacle shaped. Also the immortal jellyfish is small so is that the reason why the mc is average height or just because, not that it matters. Sorry for long review, I could've made it more concise but writing and checking are really tiresome. Good luck with that btw.
Dysfunctional - An Assassin's Guide to Reincarnating in Another World
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Okay seriously last one for now. I noticed in the story that all there has been a lot of development in the world close to the mc arrival is it because [SPOILER] not-god knew barriers may come down? im not usually this talkative but this is alot for a novel I really wonder how people cope with all these questions, uncertainties.
Thanks for the detailed review, I really appreciate the feedback :) this is my first serious attempt at writing a book, I know there's a lot of parts of this story that are rough around the edges, and that I still have a lot of room to improve. Looking back, especially in the earlier chapters, I do realize that I drag out some topics a bit too much and that my side characters could be better developed, and that some details could have been explained better. I plan to eventually go back and tweak/adjust/add to the previous chapters, and hopefully eliminate the current technical problems in my storytelling. Thank you so much for your feedback and criticism, I hope you'll continue to enjoy reading my work đ
As for the last part of your review, I admittedly didn't do much research into the Anima aspect of the story, when I started writing this story, it was doing it very casually, I didn't start taking it seriously until I had posted about ten or so chapters and was getting a lot more views than I had ever imagined. Like I already mentioned, I plan to go back and adjust the earlier chapters so that the overall story flows more naturally, as well as see if I had accidentally left any plotholes
sometimes ask in comment or usually i just threw them at the back of my mind. cause iam a late readers that read only when there is enough chapters to read like 200 ++.
Jlairu:Okay seriously last one for now. I noticed in the story that all there has been a lot of development in the world close to the mc arrival is it because [SPOILER] not-god knew barriers may come down? im not usually this talkative but this is alot for a novel I really wonder how people cope with all these questions, uncertainties.
