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Aimdaqs
AimdaqsAuthor3yr
2021-05-02 17:50

Shameless review by the author here. I initially started writing this book out of boredom when the pandemic first started, since I had so much free time. In that time, I wrote without planning anything out, just making it up as I went along, and as a result, the first 20 or so chapters can come off as kinda amateurish. However, I'd like to think that after that, the story and writing improve a lot, as I started thoroughly planning the story arcs and long term plot around the start of the third volume, somewhere around chapter 25-30. The feedback I've received seems to back that up, my early chapters get some rather mixed reactions, while my later chapters get mostly positive reactions. I encourage and appreciate all feedback and criticism, so feel free to speak your mind if and when you comment or review this book. Through past criticism and suggestions from comments, I'd like to think that I've used those experiences to improve my writing and the story. If you're someone who's been reading this book already, I hope you'll continue to read and enjoy this story, and if you're just starting this book or are considering starting it, I encourage you do so and hope you enjoy it.

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MegaMitochondria
MegaMitochondriaLv13

Is this Harem? I don't care if it is or not, I would just like to know.

Aimdaqs
AimdaqsAuthor

No, it's not a harem

MegaMitochondria:Is this Harem? I don't care if it is or not, I would just like to know.
MegaMitochondria
MegaMitochondriaLv13

Alright. Thanks bro,

Aimdaqs:No, it's not a harem
Crimson1997
Crimson1997Lv14

How has your novel been under the radar!? I love it so far!

its_L
its_LLv3

author san I am currently reading your novel and I have read around 13-14 chapters I just wanted to ask isn't there any ranking or level system or stages of like for mages I mean how to differentiate between stronger and weaker how do they even know?

DRACO137
DRACO137Lv14

great. I don't usually like harems

Aimdaqs:No, it's not a harem
LazyBoy777
LazyBoy777Lv4

is there a power/ranking system then? I just started reading

its_L:author san I am currently reading your novel and I have read around 13-14 chapters I just wanted to ask isn't there any ranking or level system or stages of like for mages I mean how to differentiate between stronger and weaker how do they even know?
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Jlairu
JlairuLv11

In short 5/5 I can't say much more without ranting, but since I have to write... Summary I really enjoy reading this story, so I gave it a well deserved 5/5 overall although you might think differently, namely because I found myself really far too high on this story. Characters 5/5 The main character to me is perfect, perhaps because I found a freakishly amount of similarities between myself and the main character, though I haven't been an assassin or tortured our lifestyles were pretty similar. Note that other characters may not be as developed. To describe I'd say the main character would be a plain shape with lots of edges and sides while others are simple shapes given colour by the development of the story. Right now the author made a pretty big event happen if it drags Story Development 5/5 It cant be said to be completely perfect, but close enough. While reading it felt like nice smooth well thought out transitions. However looking at a whole I get the feel that it was written with some urgency of some sort, I'm not complaining however its like running and adrenaline. You burn out. Right now I have to say as a reader relaxing would be nice for a little while, before urgent matters arise once more. That's it for my review world and story development goes should go hand in hand and stability of updates isn't worth complaining about. Quality over quantity any day of the week for me. Far too many annoying stuff that drags the same concept for chapters. To author, I researched a bit and found that the mc anima immortal jellyfish can actually revert back to its beginning stage of life will the mc get something similar, or does he have it? Oh and I know cats have short lifespans will cat girl die of age quickly? Will they start a new again? Is it possible to gain parts of your anima to grow ( become more like the animal) like the mc hair becomes tentacle shaped. Also the immortal jellyfish is small so is that the reason why the mc is average height or just because, not that it matters. Sorry for long review, I could've made it more concise but writing and checking are really tiresome. Good luck with that btw.

cinnamoncat
cinnamoncatLv13

Ok so i dont normally write reviews but this novel is great. My knowledge of storytelling is fueled exclusively by watching way too many story analysis video essays on youtube and an addiction to trying to understand the story makeup of the way too many novels i read, so take everything i say with a grain of salt. Im going to try to format my review by explaining why i chose the star rating for each category. Im writing this after finishing chapter 54 shuffle (part 4) i stopped here cause i ran out of fast passes lol. Writing Quality: The writing is great from what i can tell, i almost never see grammatical mistakes or misspellings. The dialogue flows pretty smoothly and i can easily visualize their conversations and actions. Story Development: Its very easy to tell that this novel is very focused on character development. I feel very conflicted on the character development aspect because, at first when writing this review i thought that most of the character development was shown through them talking or kuro's thoughts, but then i realized that it was shown a lot through actions as well. Although the words and thoughts stand out a lot more because, they are said directly to your face without you having to think about the implications. If you keep it like it is with the obvious development then i think it is more accessable for people who want turn their brain off or dont want to think too hard about the story. If you go with trying to make the story something you have to think about in order to understand how the characters developed then i think you would lose a lot of people since the isekai audience tends not to want to think to hard. Also that whole getting cut off thing before the big words was getting kind of annoying though it felt good when it actually happened after such an event. The story was fast paced with a lot of the character development seeming kind of rushed and unrealistic. Character Design: ill be honest im not entirely sure what this star category is supposed to mean but ill go off of my guesses. The characters are very unique. All the ones that actually got fleshed out are interesting and are fun to watch bounce off each other, even if i sometimes wished that instead of them bouncing of a particular character, they body slammed them into the wall, breaking their spine and then leaving them for the dead. Your ability to make me hate a character is truly inspiring. Updating Stability: I binged it in a day or two so i cant really comment on this World Background: I really liked the world this takes place in, even if the names of each country sounds like kuro tried to name it lol. im done, very tired, this took about an hour to write, my head hurts. im going to bed now.

Prince_Zetheroth
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Tam132
Tam132Lv14

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