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Jlairu
JlairuLv114yr
2020-08-10 14:54

In short 5/5 I can't say much more without ranting, but since I have to write... Summary I really enjoy reading this story, so I gave it a well deserved 5/5 overall although you might think differently, namely because I found myself really far too high on this story. Characters 5/5 The main character to me is perfect, perhaps because I found a freakishly amount of similarities between myself and the main character, though I haven't been an assassin or tortured our lifestyles were pretty similar. Note that other characters may not be as developed. To describe I'd say the main character would be a plain shape with lots of edges and sides while others are simple shapes given colour by the development of the story. Right now the author made a pretty big event happen if it drags Story Development 5/5 It cant be said to be completely perfect, but close enough. While reading it felt like nice smooth well thought out transitions. However looking at a whole I get the feel that it was written with some urgency of some sort, I'm not complaining however its like running and adrenaline. You burn out. Right now I have to say as a reader relaxing would be nice for a little while, before urgent matters arise once more. That's it for my review world and story development goes should go hand in hand and stability of updates isn't worth complaining about. Quality over quantity any day of the week for me. Far too many annoying stuff that drags the same concept for chapters. To author, I researched a bit and found that the mc anima immortal jellyfish can actually revert back to its beginning stage of life will the mc get something similar, or does he have it? Oh and I know cats have short lifespans will cat girl die of age quickly? Will they start a new again? Is it possible to gain parts of your anima to grow ( become more like the animal) like the mc hair becomes tentacle shaped. Also the immortal jellyfish is small so is that the reason why the mc is average height or just because, not that it matters. Sorry for long review, I could've made it more concise but writing and checking are really tiresome. Good luck with that btw.

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Jlairu
JlairuLv11

freakishly should've been freakish... I'm tired. I doubt there are many grammar mistakes or that it matters but sorry nonetheless.

Jlairu
JlairuLv11

Okay seriously last one for now. I noticed in the story that all there has been a lot of development in the world close to the mc arrival is it because [SPOILER] not-god knew barriers may come down? im not usually this talkative but this is alot for a novel I really wonder how people cope with all these questions, uncertainties.

Aimdaqs
AimdaqsAuthor

Thanks for the detailed review, I really appreciate the feedback :) this is my first serious attempt at writing a book, I know there's a lot of parts of this story that are rough around the edges, and that I still have a lot of room to improve. Looking back, especially in the earlier chapters, I do realize that I drag out some topics a bit too much and that my side characters could be better developed, and that some details could have been explained better. I plan to eventually go back and tweak/adjust/add to the previous chapters, and hopefully eliminate the current technical problems in my storytelling. Thank you so much for your feedback and criticism, I hope you'll continue to enjoy reading my work 😁

Aimdaqs
AimdaqsAuthor

Also, I do plan to post a few light-hearted chapters with a few less-serious short arcs, since I want to really take my time planning and developing the next serious storyline

Aimdaqs
AimdaqsAuthor

As for the last part of your review, I admittedly didn't do much research into the Anima aspect of the story, when I started writing this story, it was doing it very casually, I didn't start taking it seriously until I had posted about ten or so chapters and was getting a lot more views than I had ever imagined. Like I already mentioned, I plan to go back and adjust the earlier chapters so that the overall story flows more naturally, as well as see if I had accidentally left any plotholes

Aimdaqs
AimdaqsAuthor

Again, I really appreciate you taking the time to review my story, your feedback is really helpful and encouraging to me, so thank you :)

Starbreaker
StarbreakerLv6

is there any signs of romance yet?

Jlairu
JlairuLv11

Yup, lots of signs.

Starbreaker:is there any signs of romance yet?
Shakkachief
ShakkachiefLv14

exp

kng_maine9
kng_maine9Lv4

Thanks for the detaiLs

Daoistszuyk3
Daoistszuyk3Lv1

India

Lemon_Gremlin
Lemon_GremlinLv2

I think that the anima is just they get some physical characteristics, not things like lifespan

Heaveah
HeaveahLv5

Is this romance or harem?

Jlairu:Yup, lots of signs.
asmodeus
asmodeusLv5

check out kingdom's bloodline, it's practically a physical novel.

MILARCH
MILARCHLv13

sometimes ask in comment or usually i just threw them at the back of my mind. cause iam a late readers that read only when there is enough chapters to read like 200 ++.

Jlairu:Okay seriously last one for now. I noticed in the story that all there has been a lot of development in the world close to the mc arrival is it because [SPOILER] not-god knew barriers may come down? im not usually this talkative but this is alot for a novel I really wonder how people cope with all these questions, uncertainties.
peanut_monkey
peanut_monkeyLv10

romance

Heaveah:Is this romance or harem?
Jay_legend
Jay_legendLv13

the main character in exchange for the healing abilities got no anima abilities so no unfortunately unless the author conveniently forgot, the main character will not have any abilities related to his anima.

Jay_legend
Jay_legendLv13

no harem.

Heaveah:Is this romance or harem?
kuriosoth
kuriosothLv2

is this harem/ filled with loads of seggs scenes?

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cinnamoncat
cinnamoncatLv13

Ok so i dont normally write reviews but this novel is great. My knowledge of storytelling is fueled exclusively by watching way too many story analysis video essays on youtube and an addiction to trying to understand the story makeup of the way too many novels i read, so take everything i say with a grain of salt. Im going to try to format my review by explaining why i chose the star rating for each category. Im writing this after finishing chapter 54 shuffle (part 4) i stopped here cause i ran out of fast passes lol. Writing Quality: The writing is great from what i can tell, i almost never see grammatical mistakes or misspellings. The dialogue flows pretty smoothly and i can easily visualize their conversations and actions. Story Development: Its very easy to tell that this novel is very focused on character development. I feel very conflicted on the character development aspect because, at first when writing this review i thought that most of the character development was shown through them talking or kuro's thoughts, but then i realized that it was shown a lot through actions as well. Although the words and thoughts stand out a lot more because, they are said directly to your face without you having to think about the implications. If you keep it like it is with the obvious development then i think it is more accessable for people who want turn their brain off or dont want to think too hard about the story. If you go with trying to make the story something you have to think about in order to understand how the characters developed then i think you would lose a lot of people since the isekai audience tends not to want to think to hard. Also that whole getting cut off thing before the big words was getting kind of annoying though it felt good when it actually happened after such an event. The story was fast paced with a lot of the character development seeming kind of rushed and unrealistic. Character Design: ill be honest im not entirely sure what this star category is supposed to mean but ill go off of my guesses. The characters are very unique. All the ones that actually got fleshed out are interesting and are fun to watch bounce off each other, even if i sometimes wished that instead of them bouncing of a particular character, they body slammed them into the wall, breaking their spine and then leaving them for the dead. Your ability to make me hate a character is truly inspiring. Updating Stability: I binged it in a day or two so i cant really comment on this World Background: I really liked the world this takes place in, even if the names of each country sounds like kuro tried to name it lol. im done, very tired, this took about an hour to write, my head hurts. im going to bed now.

Prince_Zetheroth
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Tam132
Tam132Lv14

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