Review Detail of iam_adh in Romance Of Flame And Ice

This is an interesting story with a good plot. I enjoy the characters but for some reason, I feel as if I don't understand them or know them enough, When I read the first sentence of the novel I became interested immediately, but then I saw some grammar mistakes and punctuation errors. We all make mistakes and my goal is to not harp on you about it, but I feel like the story will garner more attention and flow better. I've noticed how you will sometimes captilize names and then don't. Besides these problems, I do enjoy this story, but with some more work, I'll love it! Keep up the work authornim, you nice keep going!