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2020-05-17 10:21

I like the writing quality the most in this story, with lots of detailed scenes that make you feel immersed in the story. However, there are some grammatical errors and I would suggest the author to get a proofreader. The world background seems to be close to nonexistent, I feel like I understand nothing that is going on besides the current events (apocalypse). At first, I thought the MC went back to the past to Earth and returned to his original body since he seemed so used to life as a wealthy tycoon, but then he didn't know that there was a meteorite. The MC showed no emotion at being reincarnated and having another chance or whatever, confusing me because didn't he die of a battle with his enemy? Doesn't he want to go back to the other world to see his disciples since he apparently didn't want to lose his memories? And how could he be lazing around for 4 years doing nothing? Did he even have parents in his previous life? In addition, what type of person is he if he ignores his parents who apparently dotes on him so heavily that he doesn't even have to go outside? I thought he's lived in an ancient Chinese-based Xianxia world (swords and white robes) for millions of years? Those types of worlds value filial piety a lot. What is the point of him transmigrating if he makes decisions as if he didn't? Also, what is Mian Corporation (sorry, I'm writing based on memory)? A normal company cannot survive a meteorite that affects the entire world so easily. Sorry, I kind of rambled. But I feel like the world background is the most serious issue here. Don't be pressured by this harsh review though, just write the best that you can :) Good luck!

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Xd. thanks for the review

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