Review Detail of RenuKakkar in Destiny Dating
Review detail
I have read 7 Chapters of the novel. The writing quality is good but there seems to be some typos and spellings mistakes which I have indicated in paragraph comments. Single dialogues need to be avoided. The information can be depicted in the sentence. Some sentences are ambiguous and can distract the reader. Someone has already mentioned a sentence about Carla getting accepted to Harvard after staying with Tyler for 4 years. You get accepted due to your knowledge/ work potential/intelligence and not for staying with Tyler. I got the impression that Tyler feels that Carla is not intelligent enough to get into Harvard. The narration is in the present tense through out. The story is developing nicely. The plot is interesting and is different from the stuff one gets to read here on Webnovel. In the first few chapters, I was expecting the novel to be an inter realm romance novel. Now, I feel it is heading towards an Indian movie script that has the ingredients of a plot, love, a few fights, good guys and bad guys. Ultimately the good wins. Tyler's emotions come across quite well. But by the time he meets Dani, he seems to have forgotten Carla. As far as the character design goes, I think it is progressing well. A flashback into their lives prior to meeting each other would be helpful. Not just Tyler's breakup background but prior to that, as well as that of Dani. The MC is a sort of a pessimistic guy. How did he manage to get into a strange taxi so early in the morning? But he goes along with the dating app and when he finds the going tough, he wants to come home. The world background is well described. New chapters have been added. I am saving your novel to my library to read later. On the whole, the novel had great potential and is an interesting absorbing read. All the best, author!
Destiny Dating
shadowdrake27
Liked by 2 people
LIKEReplies4
Thank you for all of the detailed comments! I plan to go through them all and make corrections. Also, I am aware of the problems with Tyler’s character/decision making at times. Working on ways to smooth that over, especially the parts where he gets over Carla too quickly. I just am not that great with character reactions to major events in general yet. I think a flashback to Dani’s life prior to them meeting is important. In the most recent chapters some stuff is revealed, but the idea is to do a slow burn. As you learn more about Dani, she will open up more about her past. There is also plans for more love interests to complicate things and more about Tyler’s backstory with Carla. Hopefully it can meet your expectations! Thanks!
Thank you for all of the detailed comments! I plan to go through them all and make corrections. Also, I am aware of the problems with Tyler’s character/decision making at times. Working on ways to smooth that over, especially the parts where he gets over Carla too quickly. I just am not that great with character reactions to major events in general yet. I think a flashback to Dani’s life prior to them meeting is important. In the most recent chapters some stuff is revealed, but the idea is to do a slow burn. As you learn more about Dani, she will open up more about her past. There is also plans for more love interests to complicate things and more about Tyler’s backstory with Carla. Hopefully it can meet your expectations! Thanks!