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BaeVida
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2020-05-11 04:13

Alright, catchy title if I must say. Synopsis is good too. Umm nice description, you went to the extent of giving your readers a feel of each character's behavior and actions, down to their thoughts. Also nice prologue, like the fact that its a different setting. A nice plot from the regulars. High school cool genius and dumb high school kings who think they are superb. But, I must say you need to work on shortening the paragraphs and though other readers may fancy long chapters, I honestly am not in that category but the school life of the students made it nice to read. This book would need some editing, you need to separate each character's words and not clog them together. But I believe with the more writing and reading, you'd do great. Sorry if I may come of as a critic, I don't mean to be. I am just giving my honest review as some readers may be like me. Cos it would disturb the flow of reading and most readers don't like that. All in all good work author, love your plot and would follow up. Already added to my library. Keep it up.

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yizreel_jez
yizreel_jezAuthor

Thanks for your honest review! I'll take your suggestions and take time to edit this story, so that readers would enjoy it more! Thank you so much

BaeVida
BaeVidaLv15

Thanks for not being angry.

yizreel_jez:Thanks for your honest review! I'll take your suggestions and take time to edit this story, so that readers would enjoy it more! Thank you so much
yizreel_jez
yizreel_jezAuthor

I gladly take suggestions from my readers because they help me improve the story, and I like being corrected by others because they can point out what is wrong in the story. I humbly thank you.

BaeVida:Thanks for not being angry.
BaeVida
BaeVidaLv15

Dats Nice. Are u on discord

yizreel_jez:I gladly take suggestions from my readers because they help me improve the story, and I like being corrected by others because they can point out what is wrong in the story. I humbly thank you.
yizreel_jez
yizreel_jezAuthor

nope

BaeVida:Dats Nice. Are u on discord
BaeVida
BaeVidaLv15

You should join. I want to add you to a server on discord. It wud also help your writing. You wud get ideas and help and input. Then we do a 2 weeks interval writer's challenge Of 200 words based on your own theme. Then have a judge from webnovel give feedback on our works.

yizreel_jez:nope
yizreel_jez
yizreel_jezAuthor

sounds interesting

BaeVida:You should join. I want to add you to a server on discord. It wud also help your writing. You wud get ideas and help and input. Then we do a 2 weeks interval writer's challenge Of 200 words based on your own theme. Then have a judge from webnovel give feedback on our works.
BaeVida
BaeVidaLv15

Yup, when you join add me up @BaeVida#7167

yizreel_jez:sounds interesting
yizreel_jez
yizreel_jezAuthor

yea

BaeVida:Yup, when you join add me up @BaeVida#7167
BaeVida
BaeVidaLv15

Ok

yizreel_jez:yea
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