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ruffatorres
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2020-05-09 14:07

The chapter are very lengthy just like I wanted it to be. I hope that the author will update more soon chapters soon so that I will have more to read.keep writing! Thank you for the exciting chapters.

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Glad you liked it! please stay tuned, coz' I'm already working on the next chapter

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Snowin
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My rating - 4.6/5 Here's why: First off, cool title. Its catchy and already hooks me in, despite me not knowing anything about the story. Nice Job! Synopsis: Cut the last line out, where you say "He addedd.." and so on. It ruins the ******* you built up in the previous lines and is quite unnecessary. Just delete the last line and you got yourself a fine synopsis. Writing - I can easily see this is most likely your first work? I would assume so, because you are struggling with exactly the same things I used to struggle with. You are drastically overusing the word "and," also, you arent using it to make the writing flow smoothly. A lot of sentences just seem like they need a proofreader and it would tightly be redefined into something great. Again, this is just my opinion as a reader. Also, you are using far too many elements into one piece of writing. For example, you used ** to signal events, you use a script-like format in the second chapter where the dialogue is just guy 1: guy 2: girl:1 and so on. Its unecessary and its not very unique. I also personally dont like when people use sound affects as in WOWOWOW andf BAAAM. it gets overused too much and i just feel like its a lazy way of describing something. I would also like to see some descriptions of scenes and people. There was almost nothing to visualize in the first two chapters, other than the prologue. As far as story - an academy is very cliche and overused, and very hard to make unique. However, the stealing of powers is very interesting and I actually really like the concept. Keep writing it, im interested to see where this goes. Also, and the most important tip of all (something i struggle with currently ) SHOW, don't Tell. That about sums it up. Sorry if this seems harsh, but im giving you honest feedback that people are afraid to do on this site. I, just like you, am still improving and working to get better and better at writing. So take this as critisism, either way, it was a fun read. And later on, im sure you'll do fantastic as a writer! NICE JOB!

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