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ThriceRecklessSong
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2020-10-14 11:34

I am currently at Chapter 119, finishing the first arc of this novel. I like this novel very much but it has some problems. I expected everything that I would want in a fanfic smut novel but then some plot happens. The beginning of this novel is quite nonsensical, without any idea who the MC is aside from what is read in the synopsis. Wasn't much of a problem since it is a smut novel, then the MC started talking about himself and his sad backstory straight out of basic revenge fap novels. Not good, but I can live with it. Other than the fact that he rehashes the same thing to other people to earn sympathy but hey, it's a smut novel. And then more background story for the MC. He is a hybrid half-demon, half-angel, pretty cool but then he has knowledge of AgK so modern fantasy? But the world still has "nobles" that look down on others because culture. The country MC lives in is clearly barbaric with a custom of "dewing" someone, which actually isn't needed since MC's mother got her wings torn off by someone with their bare hands. From how MC's mother's family is presented, they are a strong warrior race but can easily be put down by commoners, his mother anyways. Aside from that, the country he lives in got invaded and conquered, even thought MC said all countries have nukes, I mean what? His mother gets turned to a slave(modern world, much wow) when they fled to another country but his aunts did not. Stacking bad stuff happening to MC doesn't really make me sympathize with him and the original world MC lives in seems to be much more shitty compared to AgK. A small note that everyone in his old country hates him because he is a bad omen, but has been adopted by his old neighbors that wasn't there at the beginning, like what? Also, him being a hybrid makes him weak when genetics and evolution would beg to differ. If author wants to keep this weird backstory, he should make a small prologue arc. Flesh out MC's homeworld more to make sense of whatever small tidbits he wanted to explain cause it seems to me he just smacked together 2 worlds. And then we come the our MC, Parc Evans. Author said you can skip the first arc since you would not miss anything important and with all the weird backstory MC has, AkG arc being close to a copypasted story changing Tatsumi to Parc, it is better to skip some parts. MC is completely Beta in this first arc. He is not a "Conqueror" by any means and is closer to an Incubus or a Lust Demon. His smell does most of the Conquering for him, while his actions shows a variety of Beta spinelessness. Now, I do like reading the various hijinks that this led to, but it is not in line with both the synopsis and title of this novel. Author noted that MC is suppose to be a tamer but is always shown to be fighting rather than letting his women do the work for him. Author said he should improve in this point in the next arc so we shall see. Finally, the smuts scenes are great, but have fallen in quality in the last couple of chapters nearing the end of the arc. Anything after the reunion with Night Raid was quite meh. In general, the length of the smut scenes have around 70-90% foreplay before the actual act itself. I hope author gives more time to the actual act. All in all, a good smut novel that can be improve more. We shall see what the future of this one holds. tl;dr A very good smut novel with a weird and inconsistent backstory for the MC that author says is Alpha but acts like a Beta. Also, lots of foreplay and BJ scenes and less of actual ***.

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Yuri_is_Ntr
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You don't understand it's character growth! Well, that's what author say, I don't understand this... Well, I'm just too dumb apparently. 😔

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Rorschach22
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Let me try to explain my point talking about the girls of the first world: Esdeath and kurome are the best girls with more plot and screen time than everybody else, leone and najenda fit nicely in the story because leone is the perfect first girl being more animalistic in nature and is also perfect for starting an harem since that is the way of a lion pride while najenda is the perfect last girl since she is so driven to complete her objective that she put her emotions and everything else in second place. Akane and Chelsea are simply needed in the story because the chapters when kurome try to talk them into becoming one of her master's pets are a masterpiece that must be transformed into a holy book so that we can indoctrin ...Cough... Teach other people of false faith. 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Isn't sayo enough?) because they allow the story to show that the MC isn't a psychopath but somebody that is fighting to overcome his childhood trauma and that he is ready to help others in a similar situation to at least start their own recovery but then becoming a harem member isn't a necessity, she could go back home to her village, maybe even togheter with her childhood friend if their friendship can survive their misadventures or even help the angel boy from esdeath's group to set up a less corrupt government since being a pleb that suffered heavily at the hands of the old nobility and a "member" of night raid she should easily become the voice of the people or even something else. Since we are talking about it I think you could have written a good couple of chapters about Parc having a nightmare after seeing someone else experiencing something similar to his trauma and then having najenda take care of him like he has done for the girls. I'm not a writer but maybe having the MC shows some big vulnerability at least once would make him more relatable to the readers and then with the help of najenda parc would strengthen his resolve to overcome every obstacles in his way just like the general. Anyway back to the girls and ahhh, If only there were some useless characters with relative s.ex scenes that are so irrelevant to the story that we could reincarnate them in another story and this novel will not suffer one bit... Oh wait there are the 2 rashaka girls. Joking aside these 2 don't add anything meaningful to the story and apart from the scene where they were stuck under the table while Esdeath and parc talked which was really funny their absence wouldn't be felt. 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