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ThePotatoKing
ThePotatoKingLv144yr
2020-05-10 19:28

Amazing story you got here. First i would like to say. Indian mythology in webnovel is an amazing idea. It is giving me a lot of post-mahabharata vibes with arjuna , dwarka and all. Secondly, the characters are interesting and the plot is building up nicely. Though it has many grammatical and spelling errors that make it a little less smooth. I suggest that you first add an auxiliary chapter explaining all the hindi and sanaskrit terms. Also try to edit the chapters / seek someone's help in editing as that will drastically improve quality. The Story otherwise is amazingly mind-blowing. Really love it!

Yudham- The war that trembled all the Planes

LloveSsick
4.8
44 Chs

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LloveSsick
LloveSsickAuthor

First of all Thank you very much for the great review... Ohh... you were correct... for some characters and places... I have taken inspiration from mahabharata... and you have read Maharashtra... cool man... And sorry for the grammatical mistake, I'm trying to reread and edit it myself... And as for the auxiliary chapter.... I wanted to add but I was not sure how many Sanskrit terms I'm gonna use so I'm writing in 'Author's thought ' all the Sanskrit words I used in the chapter. And lastly thanks once again for reading my work and giving it your time.

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At a first look,the book is historical but further it's more than just history. Intriguing, fascinating, outstanding and thrilling. Reading this book gets me in my personal world and fantasy. The author himself is a fluent writer,the grammar is okay and the book is well detailed and descriptive. Thumbs up 👍

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RandomGuy
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The world backgrounds is really nice and fresh. Using the Indian mythology, the author really done a good job for it! This world background would definitely something refreshing and unique to other stories out there. Nicely done, author!

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Kiiara
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Love this book! The world building is very well done and I saw some comments saying this is based on Indian mythology. So, I have to applaud the author for his research then. I really appreciate the effort esp when you lay down the details of the clan. I find this book has a very intriguing plot. The synopsis is also well-written. It got me hooked at first glance. The only thing I have to advice will be the formatting and the transition as well as sentence structure. In some parts, I find the writing doesn’t flow that smoothly. It is still understandable but I stammer through the sentence so I have to re-read it again. Besides that, everything else is good! Good job author and keep up the good work! 😁

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Noih0
Noih0Lv11

Well after reading the novel, I can tell that it has many similarities to Mahabharata but it is not exact copy of it but taking reference from that so it's good. As there are still few chapters I can't say much about characters or world and the only problem I have is the grammar and other than that it's good.

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Ike801
Ike801Lv3

Other than the writing quality, I'm assuming English isn't you first language, this story reminds me one of epic proportions, like Game of Thrones or Lord of the Rings. My only complaint is that you don't say who is speaking, which is really annoying at times, so if you could fix that, that would be great. Other than that, great read so far, and I'm excited to read more from you.

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Einvee
EinveeLv2

The story is great with all its Eastern-ish vibe with bloody fights. The storytelling is quite confusing for my part as there were chapters that I find vague and small grammatical errors were noticed. Yet, it can be understood along the way. I would like to point two things to the story. First, the additional description may require for a more realistic scene that this story needs, and second, the introduction of characters may need a little bit of their background before it brings up to the spotlight. Nevertheless, it is a great story with affluent character progress. Keep up the good work, Author. 👍

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Dan_Ryder
Dan_RyderLv3

Very interesting story grounded in Indian Mythology. It's a little rough around the edges, but the author tells a compelling story that will keep you interested. I suggest you check it out if you like the genres it's under.

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