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Tucker100000
Tucker100000Lv124yr
2020-08-06 15:22

This story had a great start. The system was a little off, but could be corrected and improved over time. It did not get improved and only went downhill from there. The system seems to forget simple things. For example, it missed when the MC killed a three legged chicken and it did not update the Exp on it. It just randomly says, “you killed enough things to here’s a level or two”. The character has many loopholes and for a character that is supposed to get smarter every level, he seems to forget simple things. One time he decides to kill two mages because, “although they are non hostile they provide a passive threat to me that could go off anytime”. The problem is that the MC forgot he has this power that can make people forget things and make them have illusions. He could have just made them forget any trace of him then put them under an illusion so they can’t see him or his traces. Also the grammar is quite bad. I must say though that this story had great potential. The way the character thought was in a unique way, a way I really liked (at first). The power he had was also unique. A great book that had huge potential, that gave me more thoughts and an unique way of thinking. Poor execution though in my opinion.

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DartUpdates
DartUpdatesLv14

I haven't read it. But I would most likely agree because the authors other works are the exact same, great idea sh*t execution

Omnidoa
OmnidoaLv5

If that's true than well idk

Tibbles
TibblesLv15

The bad grammar is probably the most damaging to me when I look for a book to read, just the synopsis has errors....

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