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sinfuego
sinfuegoLv144yr
2020-05-11 07:17

Overall a fun time. A strong premise, coupled with great dramatic potential. Definitely a good time to be had here. The inherent ******* baked into the plot of this story is quite strong, and carries quite a lot. I would ask the author to include a little more description of the places during a situation. I actually have a lot of trouble with this myself as an author, so I can't give the best advice. The only thing I would say is to read more novels; that helps a lot with knowing how things should be described. Aside from that I have no real complaints. I love that the author planned out this story, at least a little. The little narrative tricks they use are also quite appreciated. I also love the characters, especially Vincent and his little protege. Yes, their dynamic is a little cliched, but they're a cliche I personally enjoy very much. This story is just fun. Keep writing! I can't wait to see how much you improve!

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sinfuego
sinfuegoLv14

meant to write t*en*sion, not sure why that got censored?

ThePotatoKing
ThePotatoKingAuthor

I know right ! it happened to me too when I was reviewing others

sinfuego:meant to write t*en*sion, not sure why that got censored?
ThePotatoKing
ThePotatoKingAuthor

Well glad you liked the story, Description of places..... well thanks for reminding me I think I have been subconsciously skipping that I will make sure to fix that. Thaks a lot for the feedback And I am glad you liked it. 😄

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Breno_RanyereLv4

This is an isekai story about a group of characters on different corners of the map working to obtain the top spot on their respective areas to achieve their dream of bringing anarchy to the world. It's a very interesting concept and the lore of the world is clearly well thought out. I liked hearing about how this work works and how we reached the point we were at. My main issue with the novel is that, it's kinda hard to follow. My biggest personal problem is that I feel there is too much focus on the story and not very much on the characters. What I mean by that is that, we keep rotating from different points of view to see what each main player is doing, but they all kinda talk the same and act the same because they all share the same goal of reaching for anarchy. At times, it feels like youre reading the same person three times. Because they are so similar, and because we rotate so much (and maybe because I have the attention spam of a goat), sometimes I forget which character I'm even following and what the current goal even is. Aside from that, I don't feel these characters have a lot of chemistry. Every interaction feels like coworkers coldly planning their next job project. Everybody is trying so hard to show off how much they know more about what they're doing than the person next to them. The best story to follow was Vincent's because he had a simpler setup. He's trying to raise a protegee. That's easy to follow. Everyone else feels like they are embarking to create world war III behind the scenes or something. I do feel like this is a novel with potential since I really like the idea of trying to show the world from different points of view, but I feel like it needed a bit more polishing on the character department. Maybe if we didn't jump from point to point so often and hadn't so much backstory to absorb, It could have been an easier read, for me at least.

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