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LordInsanity
LordInsanityLv54yr
2020-08-05 12:05

Everything is great about this book, However the MC is on the extreme end of the spectrum. He got a system that turns him into a vampire, he researches about vampires, he then acts as if the system is just him hallucinating. The MC is sooo stupid your brain cells will kamikaze each other just from reading his thought process and actions. Since this story is in a futuristic setting, I hope MC finds something to cure his extreme brain cell seppuku soon. Of course this is only my review for the first 20ish chapters, if my brain cells survive to the point where MC has the IQ higher than a retarded squirrel I will update. TLDR Character -9999/10

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LordInsanity
LordInsanityLv5

Update: Turns out he learns next to nothing in school and needs other people to tell him about crap

LordInsanity
LordInsanityLv5

Probably cuz 3 stars would seem reasonable to the author, not too low not too high, just average

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LiquidatedSteel
LiquidatedSteelLv1

Haha funny

Readingpanda
ReadingpandaLv2

Read Fantasy Evolution System (new novel)

ArisinsKareem
ArisinsKareemLv4

Hye, I'm a fellow webnovelist who goes by the name ArisinsKareem. Can you check out my new novel "Berserker... Crank Wars!"Your feedback would be very much appreciated. Also I ask for your forgiveness if I've offended you in any way(even by adding this extra sentence for you to read)

JSKOPOP
JSKOPOPLv13

Ill go and update for him the mc is Still naive and doesnt accept being a vaMpire

LordInsanity:Update: Turns out he learns next to nothing in school and needs other people to tell him about crap
GRE3D
GRE3DLv13

pretry sure he accepts it eventually. it got to the point where he just saw other students as blood bags at a certain point and that was around the second ark

JSKOPOP:Ill go and update for him the mc is Still naive and doesnt accept being a vaMpire
Eternal_Sloth
Eternal_SlothLv4

So....I'm guessing if a random voice in your head said you were a vampire and needed to drink blood to survive you would just do it....?

WattersAntone
WattersAntoneLv14

yes because i'm either crazy or its a real voice from another person or system

Eternal_Sloth:So....I'm guessing if a random voice in your head said you were a vampire and needed to drink blood to survive you would just do it....?
Dayside
DaysideLv12

Yeah for shizzle.

Eternal_Sloth:So....I'm guessing if a random voice in your head said you were a vampire and needed to drink blood to survive you would just do it....?
Ryviria
RyviriaLv13

if I grow vampire teeth, yes ;)

Eternal_Sloth:So....I'm guessing if a random voice in your head said you were a vampire and needed to drink blood to survive you would just do it....?
Gihnreaper
GihnreaperLv14

so, have you been reading still? and how would you change your review? (if at all)

Daoist7zTE8X
Daoist7zTE8XLv1

I don't need a random voice to do that

Eternal_Sloth:So....I'm guessing if a random voice in your head said you were a vampire and needed to drink blood to survive you would just do it....?
Rk6T
Rk6TLv4

There are many ways of figuring out whether it's all just in your head or if it is real mate. Acting like a situation doesn't exist is just a path towards your own downfall.

Eternal_Sloth:So....I'm guessing if a random voice in your head said you were a vampire and needed to drink blood to survive you would just do it....?
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KekekekekekekLv15

Cloud999
Cloud999Lv5

In my opinion, this novel isn’t #1 rank material, but the author is a genius for bribing ppl with extra chapters for power stones. Writing quality is not the worse but still pretty bad, lots of misspelling and wrong words used. Once example, ‘integration’ is frequently used instead of ‘interrogation’. Although this happens quite a lot, the real problem is the way the story is written. The writing style is too shallow, it doesn’t give you the sense that you are immersed in the story world. There are not enough details to describe the character and environment. Up to now I still can’t picture what the characters and the school look like. One reviewer compared this with Lord of the Mysteries, which is just absurd. The writing style of LoM makes you feel like you are inside the MC’s head, immersed in his thoughts, emotions, and actions. This novel feels like you’re reading a summary of the MC’s daily activities, it is detached and doesn’t bring you up close and personal. Story development is progressing nicely so far. Contains your typical tropes and plot armor, but it’s not as absurdly done as other webnovels. Not much else to say since the novel is just beginning. Character design: It’s too early to tell but so far just 2 characters have hints of hidden depth, which could lead somewhere interesting. For now, the characters seem very shallow. The characters need to be fleshed out more, especially regarding their physical descriptions. Vague descriptions like ‘short brown hair and tall figure’ and ‘long blonde hair and perfect proportions’ doesn’t cut it. World background has great potential. Not much is revealed yet, but there are portals to other worlds and different species and factions, which leaves much to be discovered. Overall, I like the novel. There are only 108 chapters released so far, so there is room for improvement. I look forward to seeing how this novel progresses, it definitely has great potential.

Supsooped
SupsoopedLv2

Fairly mediocre read. Nothing that's offensively bad, though also nothing special, creative or particularly good. The writing quality is "so-so". For starters, there is plenty of simple spelling mistakes. I personally don't really mind, though still somewhat annoying. What's more annoying, is the occasional grammatical error. Also nothing too bad or too frequent. It's still there though. The thing that annoys me most about the writing quality, is the really simply and at times clumsily written sentences. A lot of simple word usage and simple sentences and the prose at times doesn't really flow too well. Update stability is fine. Story is fairly generic though interesting enough to keep most people reading. Characters in this novel are one of it's other downfalls. They are all fairly two-dimensional. There just isn't much too them. What you see is what you get. There is also plenty of weird logic leaps all over the place, which make the characters feels more like NPCs, than like actual characters. Big 'meh' for me. If this was done well, this novel would have been so much better. The world is okay. Some thing are pretty interesting, while others are straight ripped out of any generic anime. The world is also pretty childishly put together. The reasoning and motivations for the way things are the way they are, only make sense if you don't really think about them. Could overall be a decent read if you haven't read many novels like this and aren't bothered too much by the occasional writing issues and the childish portrayal of the world and characters. If you're looking for real quality and/or creative, look elsewhere.

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