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Lothlo91
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2020-07-08 07:24

We are almost 50 chapters into the story and I can summarize it as One Piece canon, with an OP MC whose only real impact in the story so far has been start teaching Observation Haki to the crew (but no one has it yet), who has stolen Enel Fruit and made Luffy bounty lower due to beating Crocodile. The MC has a gamer power that lets him do simulation battles so as to grind experience and skills, making any possible kind of conflict meaningless (unless he faces an Admiral/ Yonko/, there is no enemy right now who could oppose him). The MC has been an almost completely passive character in the story, which could make sense in his objective of obtaining Enel's fruit. But even after that, he still sticks with the group and canon afterwards. The fact that he is participating in Foxy's fight and kept it canon (not fighting on the first round, and obtaining a possible crew member for his supposedly new crew) showcases a lack of originality of the author, and a missing opportunity to derail canon in anyway.

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LordofMountains
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u are right the same thing here for me the author is too afraide too write or change any ting he stole every thing from the anime even the dialogue !!!

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CopenhagenF5
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3/3/2/2/2: 2.4 Writing: 3, the quality is average at best, the author is basically rewriting One Piece with his OG-MC's POV, with a couple of chapters, in the beginning, setting the tone and basic info. There are some consistent error that has not been fixed, like belly-> Beli for the currency, Updates: 3, constant, albeit every 2-4 days release of a new chapter. Story Dev: 2, going to give it a 2 because, if you subtract what is already canon for One Piece, you get no real deviation from canon, besides the OG-MC's thoughts, actions, and it's basically reading One Piece in another POV. Char Design, 2, a mix of The Gamer vibes, with a system and questline, but only 'expand' on OG-MC, although it is in the infancy, I can only recall OG-MC trying to train/explain to the other chars about some technique that would be useful in the future. World Background: 2, What world background? Sure, you got normal One Piece lore and info, but that's about it, think you, reading and finishing One Piece, and explaining the plot back to one who has not read it. And someone else is listening to what you are explaining but has the about the same level of understanding of the plot. Final Thoughts: I can see this novel as being slow, (both update speed, and novel development, but I don't judge negatively to a slowly releasing novel) but take the time to either make this cannon part interesting, and not a reread of cannon in a different POV, or skip the beginnings of One Piece, to perhaps right before White Beard arc, or after the 2yrs as clearly OG-MC is letting what is cannon playout with no real original content/changes to the story. It is a decently-written novel to read, if you want a refresh of the plot of One Piece, told by an Extra-Character point-of-view, but currently, not my cup of tea,

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