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One_Punch_Boyy
One_Punch_BoyyLv104yr
2020-07-03 19:32

it's just a carbon copy of one piece, nothing more nothing less, a one piece from a different perspective. I thought that after skypea he would go the **** away from the crew and start a real story but welp now he will remain with them till the 2 years separation of the crew then with the excuse of beginning equal from what I understood he will keep being with them... basically a one piece less interesting and from another perspective

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Zerak
ZerakLv11

Sadly I have to agree. The story had so much potential, but the author ended up just following canon. At the start of the story the author said he would only follow canon till skypia, but that has passed a few chapters ago but the MC is still letting canon play out. Originally the MC was mean to do his own thing but it seem so like he will stick right on the crew for another 30x-40 chapters. Which sucks since it feels like the author isn’t changing canon. It’s not an issue if he sticks with them till the split up, but he doesn’t need to let canon play out. So what if they don the have strong opponents. They can make up for it in the 2 year gap. He doesn’t need to let them fight to get stronger. Hell it could be a good reason to give them when he splits away from them. He wants strong opponents but he can’t have them as it will limit the crews growth.

DragonnX
DragonnXLv13

Absolutely Right. The Problem here is that Author says, After Getting Goro Goro No Mi, He will Leave and Start his Own Crew, He Didn't. And He Will Stay Forever With them. Getting Ordered By Monkey, Always Behind his Shadow, His Crew Are Really 0 Respect For Him, He Train them and they brush him aside like some support character. always passive Author. Your. Story. Is. Terrible! -5/5

Marshal_Omiga
Marshal_OmigaLv1

what can you exexpect from noob author

Vio_sloth
Vio_slothLv1

Yikes. I guess this isnt the best story to read. Luckily I read the feedback before starting it lol

DragonnX:Absolutely Right. The Problem here is that Author says, After Getting Goro Goro No Mi, He will Leave and Start his Own Crew, He Didn't. And He Will Stay Forever With them. Getting Ordered By Monkey, Always Behind his Shadow, His Crew Are Really 0 Respect For Him, He Train them and they brush him aside like some support character. always passive Author. Your. Story. Is. Terrible! -5/5
MonkeReviewer
MonkeReviewerLv4

What do you mean the story is just fine and not really bad your probably just mad because the author didn’t add the girl you like

Martial_Pursuit
Martial_PursuitLv4

why would you make a fanfic but only follow canon, that not the point of fanfic and why have an OC that is useless to the story.

MonkeReviewer:What do you mean the story is just fine and not really bad your probably just mad because the author didn’t add the girl you like
MonkeReviewer
MonkeReviewerLv4

Creating a fanfic is hard and many of people who think it is easy to think of a path to the this story but when they try to make a fanfic they can only come up with cliches and not think of others paths to take because they are not intresting or just too hard. the author is probably following the canon and when the time it right just make it different bit by bit. I don’t really know but I jut enjoy it and this is just a fanfic it is supposed to be a persons desire and something else I forgot about.

Martial_Pursuit:why would you make a fanfic but only follow canon, that not the point of fanfic and why have an OC that is useless to the story.
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CopenhagenF5
CopenhagenF5Lv11

3/3/2/2/2: 2.4 Writing: 3, the quality is average at best, the author is basically rewriting One Piece with his OG-MC's POV, with a couple of chapters, in the beginning, setting the tone and basic info. There are some consistent error that has not been fixed, like belly-> Beli for the currency, Updates: 3, constant, albeit every 2-4 days release of a new chapter. Story Dev: 2, going to give it a 2 because, if you subtract what is already canon for One Piece, you get no real deviation from canon, besides the OG-MC's thoughts, actions, and it's basically reading One Piece in another POV. Char Design, 2, a mix of The Gamer vibes, with a system and questline, but only 'expand' on OG-MC, although it is in the infancy, I can only recall OG-MC trying to train/explain to the other chars about some technique that would be useful in the future. World Background: 2, What world background? Sure, you got normal One Piece lore and info, but that's about it, think you, reading and finishing One Piece, and explaining the plot back to one who has not read it. And someone else is listening to what you are explaining but has the about the same level of understanding of the plot. Final Thoughts: I can see this novel as being slow, (both update speed, and novel development, but I don't judge negatively to a slowly releasing novel) but take the time to either make this cannon part interesting, and not a reread of cannon in a different POV, or skip the beginnings of One Piece, to perhaps right before White Beard arc, or after the 2yrs as clearly OG-MC is letting what is cannon playout with no real original content/changes to the story. It is a decently-written novel to read, if you want a refresh of the plot of One Piece, told by an Extra-Character point-of-view, but currently, not my cup of tea,

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