This is a nice story. The character design and the world background are excellent. The story is developing well. The stability of updates is going well too. The writing quality is good too. I would suggest that you write shorter paragraphs (Something that was advised to me too) as well as punctuation. For that I wold suggest to run the draft chapter through an online grammar checker before publishing it. All the best!
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