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Vureva
VurevaLv143yr
2021-03-27 18:18

I'm gonna be blunt the MC is you typical 'Beta' Japanese MC i say beta like that because there are some differences but the core principle is all the same. Anyways grammar is good nothing more nothing less. Character design is a meh because the characters were already cheated by the original authors but with some minor deviations and world background is confusing a little bit but that's just what it's like for all the anime mashups in one world is all disorderly. Final Review, Great Read nothing to take seriously because there is no definitive plot yet just him being annoyed by girls and getting powers from them :)

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Lonely_Paradox
Lonely_ParadoxLv4

Hi, editor here... this is a fan fiction so of course the characters will be copied so there's no argument on that, now the Kyle being beta part this is 50/50, but I'm not up for that debate, these 2 aside the rest are pretty accurate... thanks for the honest review we appreciate it....

God_Negro
God_NegroLv2

why arent nibbas like though. everyone here is just so polite

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God_Negro
God_NegroLv2

Its kinda....scary

God_Negro:why arent nibbas like though. everyone here is just so polite
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