My Unconventional Delivery System!

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Woah its Esdeath instant good rating, that aside, It has an interesting concept. I would put 5 stars but some of your other novels suddenly stopped updating. If there was a dropped message I didn’t see it and I apologize.

Before I start this review I would like to state that I do enjoy this fic and it is well worth a read and also that there are probably going to be some *spoilers* along the way. So let's start with the good points before the bad ones (*gasp* yes there are some bad points and yes I am fully prepared to receive the hatred of those less than two brain cell readers who want nothing more than to lick the author's arsehole), so without further ado... 1) The concept of the story and the delivery system is absolutely golden, sure there is a system and that isn't very original but the way it is 'delivered' is original and the potential for future applications is enormous. 2) The cast is a great mash up of rarely used but well-known anime characters (Esdeath, Tohru, Kanna, Meru) that both stay true to their original counterparts and also seem to have their unique aspects during their interactions with our MC Kyle. 3) Quality, the story is well written, the vocabulary is not repetitive and for an extra pat on the back, the editor also does a swell job! Now for the less than great points 1) Kyle, The MC has major self confidence issues which are shown during his interactions with the girls in the story and especially with Tohru. The MC is completely aware that Tohru has fallen for him (in fact he literally self engineered the circumstances where she would fall for him (by pulling out the sword himself instead of his aunt)) yet he believes himself not worthy of the affection of the girl... for some (JP protagonist) reason. Sure the reason for his self-confidence issues were mentioned briefly in the first chapter or two (standard no friends - due to his Kobayashi eyes - boring life, father is an asshat etc) but since the very start of this fic we have literally only seen him in situations where he is either: laughing/getting along with his co-workers, saving girls and making them fall in love with him within minutes or making new friends at school (more girls who very likely have fallen for him). The fact that Kyle feels unworthy of Tohru or any girl in general's love is a very perplexing thing for the reader to try and relate to as we have next to no information on why he feels like that and in the end it just makes him come across as indecisive and a little disrespectful to Tohru's feelings. Kyle also has his 'pride as a man' in which he thinks he must be worthy and strong enough to stand beside Tohru which is... admirable but stupid I mean the girl is a dragon stronger than most gods in her old world. The major saving grace of Kyle's character as a whole is that he doesn't seem to have any problems casually interacting with girls as long as it isn't romantic (i know it makes little sense if he has confidence issue i know) and he also isn't dense and is aware at least of Tohru's feelings which is a big plus (even if he never acts on it). 2) The only other bad point is that we haven't heard anything from Esdeath (who personally is one of my favorite anime girls) for ages and I want her to drop in on Kyle using the power of a yandere waifu to swap worlds and stalk*ahem* chase her beloved

is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem?

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Kyle is a reincarnated mc in dragons rioting + kobayashi dragon maid + devil part timer world. he works at mgronald where maou sadao works as delivery man, he delivers food + anything the "buyers" wants and he gets 5* rating + rewards. it's good story but mc is a dense mother****er, he's got zero eq as well

I would have given this fanfic a full 5 but You just had to add the descendants of the kochou sisters, its like adding clones of the original imo. should’ve just added the original ones but this is where i drop goodbye -TDOBS

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I'm gonna be blunt the MC is you typical 'Beta' Japanese MC i say beta like that because there are some differences but the core principle is all the same. Anyways grammar is good nothing more nothing less. Character design is a meh because the characters were already cheated by the original authors but with some minor deviations and world background is confusing a little bit but that's just what it's like for all the anime mashups in one world is all disorderly. Final Review, Great Read nothing to take seriously because there is no definitive plot yet just him being annoyed by girls and getting powers from them :)

despite this ff has several good side. it was also has bad side, include: - many cliche - mc is want to live peaceful, but he was blabbering to several people that he was god - grammar is readable - typical generic harem/slice of life and little to none fight. - there was little to none character development. tbh, this ff still didnt reach 100 chapter to make full actual review but i think is fine since this ff has damn many spam review.

Too much bullshit. There will be a time where: MC breaths FL: Is this love? All A.i: Oh my God he is truly a god. No effort in gaining All of the abilities. To easy. It's kinda funny how author portray how dangerous the situation of MC but in truth the author spoiled MC too much.

Very fast character change, he just transmigrated and he is an ordinary human who has not even seen murder, but in just a short time he did not hesitate to beat other people until they were paralyzed, and somehow all he beat were women, and it was a bit uncomfortable for me, saw a woman beaten until paralyzed. Well, maybe I am really a naive person who can't bear to see a woman beaten to the point of paralysis because of a trivial matter. pfft, I prefer a smug second-generation plot.

why make new books if ur gonna drop em? ?

The Idea is good but both the Story and Mc is trash... ............ ............ ............ ............ ............ ............ ............

🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮 yeah this sucks........................................................................................................................

this ruin it, the reward of money, physical properties where system literally bend reality and brainwash everyone else truly ruin the story for me, I'm dropping this novel.

Patheic mc ... ... Patheic mc ... ... Patheic mc ... ... Patheic mc ... ... Patheic mc ... ... Patheic mc ... ... Patheic mc ... ... Patheic mc ... ...

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Dude, thank you for the story you write, they are really good, especially against the background of current stories, yours is like a breath of fresh air and good luck in the future !!!

I liked this project, but then I quit because of boredom 1) the main character after 3 three deliveries is too strong. 2) little plot 3) little plot and stories .