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2020-03-29 14:56

Love the story, A few grammar errors here and there, but not bad. It is a great new take for a cultivation novel. Not the same old story redone with new characters. Good job, can't wait to read more.

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Daoist_Zhang_Dao
Daoist_Zhang_DaoLv5

The book is pretty good, the grammar and general use of English could be improved but overall, the book is a nice read. Firstly the MC is intelligent, he uses his advantages properly and knows when to avoid unfavorable situations. The MC isn’t a pervert which is very refreshing, the female characters are also not unreasonably in love with him nor do they drop their pants in heat as many perverted authors like to write. The flow of the story itself is well grounded and based on logic, apart from the necessary plot points where MC is given certain powers for free for the sake of the plot. The MC himself is an individual who follows the eye for an eye rule, he also does so logically and not the “you disrespected me so i will murder eighteen generations of your family” way. This is a nice break from the usual cliche in most novels of this genre. The EQ of the MC is not low although the MC ignores incidents where female characters show interest in him. I am not certain if this novel will have a love interest but I am enjoying it nonetheless. The character emotions of the MC are also fairly fleshed out, showing a dynamic range of reactions and emotions. The MC does not forget his past life and ‘become’ the new person, instead he remains as himself but hides his past life from others which is nice because I dislike when an MC forgets their old life to embrace the new, in reality no one could just ignore their old lives like that and most people would be apprehensive about abandoning their persona like that. If they can abandon it so easily then they are a shallow person. The side-characters are also not NPCs, they show emotions and contemplation as well as self reflection and self improvement. When faced with a challenging situation some of them change and decide to become better, others cower in fear and properly give up on making trouble. This is a wonderful development process because it is far more true to life, unlike how in other novels the side-characters hold onto grudges even till death, even grudges borne from small matters. The world development is fairly good, no real information has been provided about where exactly the MC is in the world, it mostly information about the close proximity of the MC. I.e the author has indeed described the community the MC lives in but hasn’t talked about countries or continents or anything like that. This is actually not a bad situation and you don’t particularly notice it. Overall, the book is well worth your time. A majority of individuals who read it will enjoy the it.

AzagalPlay
AzagalPlayLv14

I really loved the beginning, the mc was cold, had a special background and wasn't stupid but then everything began to become sh*t when the shameless bunch appeared, they are extremely annoying: -first they just tried to kill him and steal his game. ->then mc just forgave them for no valid reason. -then they followed him and invited themselves at his home. ->mc again forgave them for no valid reason -then they were bold enough to look into his private stuff (while knowing his personnality). ->mc again forgave them for no valid reason -he tries to work but gets interrupted again ->but still forgave them for no valid reason Also the most annoying girl magically falls in love with the mc while having known him for less than a week. In the beginning you feel like mc's coldness and ruthless personnality is legitimate but then he just lets the shameless bunch do what they want and constantly gets pushed around by their behaviour and requests, while having massacred the kids who tried to kill him he tolerates worse people for longer for no reson, he is totally illogical, the plot feels too forced because of all of the inconsistencies in this story and it becomes total sh*t after that because of the annoying bunch. It just becomes too frustrating to read this when you see the mc getting pushed around by shameless people and not do anything to them while still agreeing to their shameless requests. Many will drop this like me because of this part of the story. It began real good but became total sh*t because of only 5 chapters.

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