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Jin_DaoranLv105yr
2020-03-28 17:06

The character of the MC is shown clearly in the first few chapters of the story, but before the cliche of the cool and emotionless guy in a high school gets old, the plot starts and the gods sh*t on everything. The premise of the story in attractive: a world abandoned by the gods, leaving the humans to face ragnarok alone. Sounds bleak. This reader hopes that if humanity prevails there should be some kind of reward, like the one who stopped it becoming the One True God and not letting all the others back in because of their cowardice, the assh*les. The action is fast-paced, the MC is a wank fantasy, there are monsters everywhere. What is not to like? The grammar is fine, and writing style can come with experience. The story has potential and is stepping along nicely. I hope it lives up to the excellent beginning. Keep up the good work, author!

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Barbare
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Thank you very much! Right now i'm doing my best to fix my sentence building issues that other people have pointed out to me and i will get back to it.

Jin_Daoran
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You're welcome! Your idea is excellent, and I'm looking forward to see how it develops in the future.

Barbare:Thank you very much! Right now i'm doing my best to fix my sentence building issues that other people have pointed out to me and i will get back to it.
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Don't worry, I may be the author of this novel, but I know how to be unbiased in my self-criticism. Where to start... Oh yes, so the writing during the first 30-40 chapters is rather rough either in grammar or in the accuracy of some information, the reason of that is that English isn't my first language and that taking into account that this is my first novel I didn't took enough time to verify certain things I wrote, please bear with me, I have improved a lot in the meantime (I swear). I'm planning to edit all of this but it's not going to happen right away... Tell yourself that if you like the beginning, the story can only get better and better as you go through the chapters. Also, the biggest weakness I would attribute to my novel is the pace of publishing, I'm not regular (though that might change in the next few months as I'm on vacation and fully focused on this)... BUT (yes, we're finally getting to the part where I stop bashing my own novel and that I will tell you why you should read it). -Although some of the (secondary) characters may sometimes seem stereotypical (anyway, if they do, they won't stay in the story long enough to have an importance), each of the main characters is unique and if you like characters who act logically you will love the MC and his compagnions (except one, or maybe two). -The story revolves around different mythologies, different pantheons of deities as well as different folklores and on this side you will be spoiled. -I am very active in the comments as well as on discord (Barbare#6899) so if you have questions, ask them and you will be sure to get an answer. So... I think that's more or less everything

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