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meetkalasLv13yr
2021-07-06 02:47

How come a great story hasn't been updated in more than 6months... That's very terrible. Please update. I have enjoyed it so far. Great story, the suspense plays with my emotional psych

Awakening of the Ancient: Rise of the Fallen

Demonic_angel
4.7
197 Chs

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saske_uchi
saske_uchiLv13

I didn't even read this novel but I gave 5 star reviews because of my craze for Rise of Demon God. Please don't concentrate on other novels and give your 100% on writing the 1st novel. I am eagerly waiting for your chapters everyday so do try posting atleast 2 chapters a day for Rise of Demon God. Do not stop posting. All the best. Just post continuously we will make your novel best in the ranking with our power stones and best reviews.

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totallyNotGarfield
totallyNotGarfieldLv4

I've already read "Rise of the Demon God", and I saw that you wrote more novels. I gave it a shot and it was good! I'd like to say that the description is somewhat confusing. It indeed gave information about the novel, but not the way it should've done. It seems rather forced, and as I said, confusing.

4yr
Manvinder01
Manvinder01Lv5

Have to be honest one of the best book I have been reading absolutely a gold mine....love how the charactor are be introduced and love back story of everyone in it so far..... I hope it won't be dropped....

4yr
Wallabalooza
WallabaloozaLv3

There are quite a few issues with this story. First and foremost is how absolutely slowly it moves. By chapter 20, the story has barely even begun, and it took about 11 chapters to reach what should have essentially been the first. This feels like a result of you going into extreme detail about backstory and world building before even giving the reader a chance to care about your characters. These are things that should have been introduced gradually, and less forcefully, as the story progressed, not all at once at the beginning. You also have a tendency to over explain things a lot. This not only takes up 200+% more words than you need to, it gets very tiring to read. The grammar is okay, but not great. You use "!!!!" and "???" and chatroom-like syntax, and it makes your story come off as if written by an overly excited teenage girl (which may be the case, I don't know). Your dialogue tends to be heavy eye-roll material as you often use it for exposition, making your characters come off as robotic and unrealistic. Backstory should not be forced into dialogue. It kills a story. And you've done that /a lot/ in yours, and right from the start as well. You've got a few interesting ideas and some potential, but the way you write seriously needs an overhaul. Spend a little time reading better written works, see how they do things and try to reach where you are at Ch20 in 2-4 chapters instead. Good luck.

4yr
AsunaKaoru
AsunaKaoruLv13

Reveal spoiler

4yr
TheGentlemenWorld
TheGentlemenWorldLv10

After years of study on literature and novels in general, I have finally had a revelation. Cultivation novels are retard magnets that try to forcefully make the reader feel smarter. I have read so many comments, in cultivation novels specifically, that make me want to bash my head into a wall that I can no longer not say this. Wait a minute What if I'm mistaken? You see, most cultivation novels have a certain tag next to it: Harem. That's it! Harem novels are the true retard magnets! That's why ever fanfic harem novel I've ever read has made me want to puke my guts out! I can see clearly now!

4yr
RoyLamar
RoyLamarLv12

Good immersive story. Though I wish it would have more chapters. So good so far.............................................................

4yr
Demonic_angel
Demonic_angelAuthor

Reveal spoiler

4yr
king_sake
king_sakeLv13

mani I'm honestly just doing this for the xp so don't take my review seriously ight so just don't look past this point why tf are u still reading

4yr
Jhone_K
Jhone_KLv10

Reveal spoiler

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