webnovel
Jerry55
Jerry55Lv104yr
2020-10-02 19:35

[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]👨‍👩‍👧‍👧🥰😁💘💗🙇‍♀️👨‍👩‍👧‍👦💛💖❤🤍💝🙆‍♀️💜👨‍👩‍👦‍👦💙😍💚

Awakening of the Ancient: Rise of the Fallen

Demonic_angel
4.7
197 Chs

Liked by 1 people

LIKE
Replies1
Me_Personally7
Me_Personally7Lv2

Hello reader, David here. So, I am a bit new to this site/app and so far, I must say that the experience is great. I was so lucky that I even got a collaboration with OSNOF (an author), to make a novel! There's a high probability that you know where this is going. Yes, this is self-promotion — but wait! I am tremendously sorry for the disturbance, but it is just that we need an audience that gives us motivation, assistance and knowledge in writing amazing stories. The reader and overall audience plays a significant role in the creating of a masterpiece. Without you, how would we be certain as to what works and what fails? OSNOF and I need you! The story we are writing is a first-time thing, this is our first novel here, and it started mildly slow and confusing, but there was a major improvement in the later chapters. Hop into a completely magical new world with our Main character and watch him gradually grow and change. Watch as he struggles and fights his way against figures of utmost monstrosity! Our novel contains the most popular elements seen in Webnovels, including: A system, magic, fantasy, creatures, leveling, monsters, even our own things like elemental crystals, etc. Click on our profile picture and read ‘New World Archeria!’ today! Hopefully I did not disappoint anyone by this message. And Hopefully I did my part as OSNOF’s editor and novel promoter. Thank you, for you precious time. (Reading it is optional, if you are currently reading this novel, and is looking for another novel to read simultaneously, then our novel is highly recommended)

4yr
1
Other Reviews
saske_uchi
saske_uchiLv13

I didn't even read this novel but I gave 5 star reviews because of my craze for Rise of Demon God. Please don't concentrate on other novels and give your 100% on writing the 1st novel. I am eagerly waiting for your chapters everyday so do try posting atleast 2 chapters a day for Rise of Demon God. Do not stop posting. All the best. Just post continuously we will make your novel best in the ranking with our power stones and best reviews.

5yr

totallyNotGarfield
totallyNotGarfieldLv4

I've already read "Rise of the Demon God", and I saw that you wrote more novels. I gave it a shot and it was good! I'd like to say that the description is somewhat confusing. It indeed gave information about the novel, but not the way it should've done. It seems rather forced, and as I said, confusing.

4yr
Manvinder01
Manvinder01Lv5

Have to be honest one of the best book I have been reading absolutely a gold mine....love how the charactor are be introduced and love back story of everyone in it so far..... I hope it won't be dropped....

4yr
Wallabalooza
WallabaloozaLv3

There are quite a few issues with this story. First and foremost is how absolutely slowly it moves. By chapter 20, the story has barely even begun, and it took about 11 chapters to reach what should have essentially been the first. This feels like a result of you going into extreme detail about backstory and world building before even giving the reader a chance to care about your characters. These are things that should have been introduced gradually, and less forcefully, as the story progressed, not all at once at the beginning. You also have a tendency to over explain things a lot. This not only takes up 200+% more words than you need to, it gets very tiring to read. The grammar is okay, but not great. You use "!!!!" and "???" and chatroom-like syntax, and it makes your story come off as if written by an overly excited teenage girl (which may be the case, I don't know). Your dialogue tends to be heavy eye-roll material as you often use it for exposition, making your characters come off as robotic and unrealistic. Backstory should not be forced into dialogue. It kills a story. And you've done that /a lot/ in yours, and right from the start as well. You've got a few interesting ideas and some potential, but the way you write seriously needs an overhaul. Spend a little time reading better written works, see how they do things and try to reach where you are at Ch20 in 2-4 chapters instead. Good luck.

5yr
AsunaKaoru
AsunaKaoruLv13

Reveal spoiler

4yr
TheGentlemenWorld
TheGentlemenWorldLv10

After years of study on literature and novels in general, I have finally had a revelation. Cultivation novels are retard magnets that try to forcefully make the reader feel smarter. I have read so many comments, in cultivation novels specifically, that make me want to bash my head into a wall that I can no longer not say this. Wait a minute What if I'm mistaken? You see, most cultivation novels have a certain tag next to it: Harem. That's it! Harem novels are the true retard magnets! That's why ever fanfic harem novel I've ever read has made me want to puke my guts out! I can see clearly now!

4yr
RoyLamar
RoyLamarLv12

Good immersive story. Though I wish it would have more chapters. So good so far.............................................................

5yr
Demonic_angel
Demonic_angelAuthor

Reveal spoiler

5yr
king_sake
king_sakeLv13

mani I'm honestly just doing this for the xp so don't take my review seriously ight so just don't look past this point why tf are u still reading

4yr
Jhone_K
Jhone_KLv11

Reveal spoiler

4yr
Related Stories

Mysteries of Immortal Puppet Master

[The latest masterpiece by the author of Reverend Insanity] In the heart of a volcano, the mechanical fairy palace left by the ancients longed for a successor. The mother sacrificed her life to obtain the treasure seal of the fairy palace, entrusting it to Ning Zhuo on her deathbed. Buddha Heart Demon Seal! To deliver oneself to enlightenment, and others to demonhood. The bearer of the seal, by lightly engraving the Heart Demon Seal, could control mechanisms as if they were feathers. While others wielded it, exhausted in spirit and heavy in mind; Ning Zhuo could command it with ease, light and graceful as in a dance. Ning Zhuo said, "Mother, your child will surely fulfill your trust and claim that fairy palace!" Indeed: The chance encounter with a spirited secret, where skill merges with supreme logic. Universes open to new realms, where natural beauty rivals the heavens. Ancient bells transmit the law, dancing under the moon's pure radiance. With the true form embodying myriad things, who in the world could contend!

Gu Zhen Ren · Eastern
4.7
612 Chs

Unscientific Beast Taming

Shi Yu woke up one day in a world built on the foundation of Beast Taming, where powerful monsters roam and great societies formed around the Beast Tamers who tame them. After concluding that he'd been reincarnated because he was good looking, he put his skills as a mythology expert to use, aiming to become a professional Beast Tamer so he wouldn't be poor again in this life. Thankfully, he had been reborn with a trump card in this life, a Skill Index that broke certain rules of the Beast Taming world. Starting from zero by secretly copying and teaching skills to domestic and wild beasts alike, Shi Yu stepped on the path of Beast Tamers as he raised a bunch of logic-defying and unreasonably strong beast pets... Key Words: Beasts, Beast Pets, Pets, Summoning

Sounding Stream · Eastern
4.3
1962 Chs

Top Tier Providence, Secretly Cultivate for a Thousand Years

Being reincarnated in a cultivation world, Han Jue realizes that he can live his life like a video game. He con reroll his cultivation potential and connate providence. So, he spends 11 years rerolling for a good one... [Unparalleled: Immortal beauty, top-notch charm] [Destined Sword fanatic: Top-notch Sword Dao aptitude, top-notch Sword Dao learning ability] [Unparalleled Movement Technique: Top-notch movement technique aptitude] [Descendant of the Immortal Emperor: You will receive an unparalleled cultivation technique and 1,000 superior-grade spirit stones] In pursuit of longevity, Han Jue decides to cultivate in a low-profile manner. A thousand years later, generations of cultivators have become history. That is when the deities start cleansing the mortal world. Han Jue can no longer hide and must do something about it. Then he realizes, deities and gods aren't that powerful after all!

Let me laugh · Eastern
4.5
1192 Chs

Two Realms Shuttle Gate: Don't Call Me a Demon!

Su Jie, capable of traveling between Blue Star and the Cultivation World, discovered that cultivation was just too difficult. Spirit Pills, Magic Artifacts, Pocket Worlds, and inherent comprehension—each was a mountain on the long road to immortality. Not until Su Jie found out that Demon Cultivators refined corpses by killing, extracted souls to cultivate fiends, and used fear as sustenance for their cultivation. Need souls to consecrate a Soul Summoning Banner? Get to know the pig farms that slaughter millions of pigs a year. Need human fear to cultivate fierce ghosts? Stock up on ghost houses, horror films, and horror games... Need fresh blood for Demon Techniques? Across the ocean, America is the world's largest grey market blood transfusion station... ...... Years later. "You devil, how many people have you killed? And you still have the face to call yourself a good person? Pah, today I shall act on behalf of heaven to mete out justice." The Tianyuan World's most beautiful person's eyebrows were furrowed with rage, as she stared at the terrifying Devil before her, enveloped in wronged souls, with thousands of ghosts parading on his Soul Banner, seated in a palace made of bones, she posed her soulful question. The Devil slowly stood up and pulled out a business card that read "Hua Country's Philanthropist of the Year / Founder of the World's Largest Chain of Ghost Houses / Owner of Blue Star's Largest Livestock Slaughter Business / Emerging Tycoon of the Entertainment Industry." "You see, I'm really not a devil, okay? Nowadays, who still uses such a lowly method as killing people to cultivate as a devil!"

Jade Brocade Sword · Eastern
3.6
602 Chs

Complete Martial Arts Attributes

The dimensional rifts link the earth to the Xingwu continent. This is the dawn of the martial arts era! I will be useless if I don't practice martial arts? Don't worry, I have a system that allows me to pick up attributes. When other people drop attributes during their training, I can pick them up secretly. Huh? Did you just say that beating up people will make them drop attributes too? In that case... You defeated a sword skill genius. He dropped Enlightenment×2, Sword Talent×1... You've picked them up. Your insights have improved and you've gained a beginner stage sword talent! You defeated a blade skill talent. He dropped Blade Battle Technique×1, Malicious Blade Intent×1... You picked them up and learned a rare blade battle technique! You've also figured out Malicious Blade Intent and have become extremely fierce! You defeated a physique talent. He dropped Physique Scripture×1, Holy-Blood Dominant Physique×1... You picked them up and learned a new top-grade scripture! You are exceptionally lucky to have received the Holy-Blood Dominant Physique. It can change your physique completely and you earned a god-level title 'Endless Health'. Someone killed a powerful star beast and dropped Spiritual Sight×1 and Blank Attribute×60... You picked them up secretly and receive a spiritual eye talent as well as 60 points to add to any of your current attributes! You defeat many opponents in your life. You accidentally kill an innocent devil and split the universe into two when you're practicing your blade at home. You burst the sun with your fist and the world is engulfed in darkness... That's when you realize... You're invincible!

Don't Enter The Jianghu · Eastern
4.3
3203 Chs
Login