Review Detail of tuba_san in Apocalypse : The tale of a hero

I've only read the first chapter. And it's setting up a very vast universe with hunters and monsters. It's written in a first person style which is pretty cool. The grammer isn't top-notch but I think that if the author went through it and fixed the errors, this chapter would become 10 times more immersive. You improve as you write but don't forget to come back and fix anything that you've already written.