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RoozLv124yr
2020-08-22 12:36

Not what I was looking for. Let's start with the good things - grammar is pretty good, updates are frequent, most of the characters are believable. Unfortunately, I can't read a story where an MC should be a 32 yo man, but behaves according to his new age of 12. Literally nothing of his behavior suits his alleged mental age. And when I see a teenager protagonist I drop the story on the spot, no exceptions. The story also has a dense teenager romance going on, which is always a turn off. Oh, and the system has mandatory quests with punishments for failing aka the worst kind of system. But system stuff is not a focus of the novel and generally only used to show people's stats, so that part is bearable.

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The_GajiAuthor

Sorry to hear that the story wasn't your cup of tea Aifugeni but thank you for taking the time to read it and give it a chance. And another thanks for leaving a review. I know that not everyone will like the same things so I respect all opinions. In regards to your comment about the MC's behavior not matching his age there were signs of this before he even went back in time. Even as a 30 year old he showed that he didn't act in the way most people would expect from someone his age. I myself am a working ***** paying bills and student loans but I still find enjoyment in slapping my friends in the face with incomplete halfs of pb&j sandwhiches lol and trust me they make sure to return the favor. I know that there are certain expectations with how people should act after reaching a certain age but for those that don't fit that mold I attribute it more so to the individual uniqueness that is bound to be found in everybody. Once again thank you for giving the story a chance and for taking the time to leave a review :)

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