Review Detail of reaper_grim in The Mysterious Black Magician

haven't read anything yet, but reading the review ting made me very interested mainly be she's I myself write a bit and I can see the grammar errors already. So I'll do you a favor and basically go through you're story and do the highlight thing with sentences and point out what should be spelled like what and what words should be used or placed seeing you also forget to put words that are needed :3 I also am leaving a 3 star mainly for the generic world background with monsters, and the mc family member is sick background, but I will not put anything about being weak and that it's a choice for that bit.