reaper_grim
Writing
of reading
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Read books
bottle out of his backpack*
Ran out of fuel*
her face how I've seen you use he and she correctly then suddenly just not '-' I'm glad I looked all the way to the last chapter to see you changed but it's no excuse to leave the very first few chapters like this man
weights*
here*
Yoooo I actually am looking forward for future chapters it's not bad, but grammar needs sum work other than that I like what's happening
are the same*
get rid of at
in their party
The most important thing
Right now, all my peers are already
but, for some reason
This monster is only level 1.
haven't read anything yet, but reading the review ting made me very interested mainly be she's I myself write a bit and I can see the grammar errors already. So I'll do you a favor and basically go through you're story and do the highlight thing with sentences and point out what should be spelled like what and what words should be used or placed seeing you also forget to put words that are needed :3 I also am leaving a 3 star mainly for the generic world background with monsters, and the mc family member is sick background, but I will not put anything about being weak and that it's a choice for that bit.
W-Wha bruh you don't have koneko or Akeno!! rjenzjsjjsjsjsnejdhejsjsksksk bruh he'd at least bring koneko and Akeno, especially Koneko seeing the two gree up together basically, plus he went through the trouble with Akeno so I'd at least think he'd bring her as well it don't feel right not bringing them two