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Carlos_Balbizan
Carlos_BalbizanLv13yr
2021-10-23 11:24

it's kind of boring to compare to other stories, but i would recommend reading "as chronicas de vali masters" (everything missing here is there) the plot is forced to stay the same, even when the MC changes a lot (and this without any real justification , just padding), writing and development as a whole need a big improvement. and I'm not talking about changing the MC's personality, but about the author's own mistakes to force the story when I mention the other book

Mikaelson Family Across The Multiverse

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_EMI_
_EMI_Author

Thank you for your input, I'll try to improve.

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Carlos_Balbizan
Carlos_BalbizanLv1

by the way, even the story I mentioned has many errors, like the beginning was forced, and how he simply threw the story in the trash to make it go to other dimensions without a proper reason besides the people close to him throwing him in another dimension, without no explanation of how this could be possible. if you are reading it, ignore the 2nd world completely as it is unnecessary, and I would also recommend a slower story and not as rough as the one I recommended, as it kind of moved too fast and lost a lot that would be useful to prolong the story. . sorry i got a little carried away writing hehe

_EMI_:Thank you for your input, I'll try to improve.
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Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

I’m not too sure where you’re coming from. The ending of the fanfic you’re recommending was terrible. He was betrayed by everyone expect for one girl, and he killed her right after.

2yr
Carlos_Balbizan
Carlos_BalbizanLv1

did you really read the story I mentioned? Or did you just read the ending without context that the author created? and he was betrayed because of his deeds, playing and manipulating all humanity just to create a way to kill him or take him to another plane, because he was already bored... and he also let himself be betrayed

Kw0z:I’m not too sure where you’re coming from. The ending of the fanfic you’re recommending was terrible. He was betrayed by everyone expect for one girl, and he killed her right after.
2yr
Carlos_Balbizan
Carlos_BalbizanLv1

and in case you're talking about the next worlds he went to, I don't have an adequate answer to that because you may be right, since I stopped reading from the moment he switched worlds, because the quality dropped greatly

Kw0z:I’m not too sure where you’re coming from. The ending of the fanfic you’re recommending was terrible. He was betrayed by everyone expect for one girl, and he killed her right after.
2yr
Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

I did read it, and my opinion is still the same. It just leaves a bad taste in my mouth that he was betrayed by his own daughter, and multiple other people. It doesn’t matter if he let himself be betrayed.

Carlos_Balbizan:did you really read the story I mentioned? Or did you just read the ending without context that the author created? and he was betrayed because of his deeds, playing and manipulating all humanity just to create a way to kill him or take him to another plane, because he was already bored... and he also let himself be betrayed
2yr
Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

Also, I dropped the fanfic when he changed worlds too. It got pretty boring.

Carlos_Balbizan:and in case you're talking about the next worlds he went to, I don't have an adequate answer to that because you may be right, since I stopped reading from the moment he switched worlds, because the quality dropped greatly
2yr
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amaturewriter
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Its interesting....like I dont know jack **** about the universe MC is in..neither the characters but I am interested....so author bro.....maybe provided some info..cause I thought the mother was evil dude.......also just saying,..dont mix marvel and DC......just dont..**: MC seems too weak despite his OP wishes....keep him godlike....[anyone of his wishes could make him a god] Suggestion and worlds: OP MC....provide info for universe...add some romance and fluff but pls build it and no sad angsty tragic ****....keep it happy and fluff...just no wife stealing or moms....also if harem keep it small....also....if anime worlds pls go before cannon.... -Pirates of the carribean? -Frozen--you know why😉😊 -One piece [12 years before] -fairy tail [400 years before] -for the 2 worlds above..would be dope if MC self inserts instead of travelling

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The grandfather thingy is just straight BS. Bor (which is Thor’s grandfather name) is supposed to be in hel cuz he died dishonorably and he’s vindictive, paranoid warmonger not some nice loving grandpa, even at one point Thor kills him after hela revives him but in Thor’s defence he didn’t know it was his granpa and Bor never mentioned to tell him that in the comics. You should just retcon the whole grandpa thing imo it just sounds stupid. Overall it’s a good fanfic if you ignore the little inconsistencies here and there.

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Super cool 😎 Interesting Unique Love it 😍 Also I can’t wait for more chapters I hope there is more chapters about MC kol ,with original sibling…

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