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xxAlter
xxAlterLv115yr
2020-02-10 22:14

The story is great! The chapters are a bit iffy because of some word mistakes and such, but man, a VR Moba that's similar to Lol and Dota 2? Count me in! The story really picks up after the first few chapters, although the MC isn't OP and lacks any knowledge of the game, but he's equipped with very great swordsmanship, courtesy of Mr. Ghost-san. The character development is also pretty clear and I can't wait to read more. I'd like to see how our MC takes his unambitious character and changes it for the better!

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kiritoo
kiritooLv10

it's like "hikaru no go" anime

ROWT
ROWTLv4

And its bullshit no part of it worth sharing. Stupid that's all sums up the novel. "Happy" reading.

ROWT
ROWTLv4

I'm curious why there's literally little bad reviews, when the novel is really so bad that's my IQ going down everytime I try to give it a chance. Just the part of Missing and Gank the author said they're having difficulty about those terms HHAHAAHAH If you havr even the tiniest common sense in you, missing is missing. And that's difficult? So much for saying they're genius in studying HHAHAHAAHAHA

kiritoo:it's like "hikaru no go" anime
CHAOS_FOOLISH
CHAOS_FOOLISHLv13

Exp

Abhijeet_Singh_7612
Abhijeet_Singh_7612Lv1

sare part hai hi nhi

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M_Fil
M_FilLv10

I was generous enough to read the first 20 chapters. With most reviews the first 10 should already suffice as to not waste time. Anyway here's what I thought: Story Development (4/5): The author clearly has an overall picture of how he wants the story to pan out. The overall story arc seems interesting enough. This was the only reason I could bear to read so far. However, it could be so much better if the author weaved in background context and world-building to supplement the story arc. It helps the reader understand the pace of the story. World building/Background (2/5): Bland. The author doesn't care to elaborate on the world and we are tunnel-visioned to what the MC is doing. The author makes it hard to visualise the world and the context/connection between everything. The world so far feels like so instance-based. (E.g. MC is at point A then at point B). It makes it hard to judge the passage of time and the flow of the novel too. Also the author makes inconsistencies with details about characters and other stuff. Characters (2/5): Characters so far seem bland and 1 dimensional. MC has no defining features about himself. He is literally a kid with no aspirations who is average in life and has a mundane personality. An epitome of a blank canvas. Everyone else in the story has no defining context. They literally seem like faceless NPCs that are only there to trigger a storyline progression. Arthur is probably the only one in the story with some detailed background. However, this detail was mostly drawn upon from my previous understanding of Arthur in pop culture. Writing Quality (1/5): Bad. So many punctuation and grammatical errors. Numerous spelling mistakes and sometimes the author put the word novice where the MCs name should be (Novis). A lot of the paragraphs are convoluted and redundant and could be much more concise and fluid. The author clearly struggles sometimes in trying to express his vision. Although this may be an ******* novel site, if you are confident enough to have this published/shown on the internet then please EDIT YOUR WORK.

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