The story is interesting and has good potential at the beginning. The idea of bringing the farm into another world system is really good. But I'm already coming to a major problem, it's unreadable (there's a wall of text in the chapters, no capitalization for the beginning of some sentences, punctuation is sometimes non-existent, chapter names sometimes mean nothing). Now concerning the story itself it started slowly and only became really interesting after about 20 chapters, which is regrettable, but it is better to build a story with a good basis. Some things about the story are not bad, but what bothers me is the Mc who is quite stupid, clear and simple, he has so many resources but doesn't even use a fraction of them and is too lazy to train even when he can make his shadows train for him, he still doesn't take it seriously and gets beaten by beginners who are even later, he decimates more than 60 dead eaters and kills them all and that's before he gets a good training and now in the 2nd world, he chose the twilight and honestly; it's probably the worst decision the author could have made, he's flinching at all the vampire eyes, which is a serious problem for a world that's not one of the most gory and terrifying. Overall, an average novel that needs a publisher quickly, but I think it has good potential, the author is also very active with more than 60 chapters in 4 days. Ps: I read the synopsis well so I know the author is a beginner and this novel is a bit of a draft but to improve it, you have to give constructive criticism.
Ryan_Colman
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