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2020-03-06 21:37

It’s a decent fanfic but could use some cleaning in the grammar department. Also If your going to translate from Spanish to English I would recommend dropping the “kun” and the “chan”, your translating to English not Japanese dude.

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I would like to do it but let's say I don't have the tools to do it personally, I don't have an editor and I'm trying to do everything the best I can, that's why I've asked for patience and at the same time, I've warned since the introduction. As far as removing idioms, I don't think it's possible because of the simple fact that the characters in my stories are specifically Japanese, in other words, they have to say such titles by culture. If they were characters from other works such as Marvel, I wouldn't write those idioms because it wouldn't make sense. Thank you very much for reading my story despite all the mistakes.

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