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morceaux
morceauxLv125yr
2020-01-23 00:14

That's a good story. The only real problem as of chapter 35 is the age of the MC. He is 8 - 9 years old but behaves like an ***** and nobody seems to find anything wrong with that.

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Belial232
Belial232Author

I'm not sure what was censored but I'm assuming it was grown up. But thanks for the review 😀

morceaux
morceauxLv12

ad ult was censored xD. Didnt see that.

Salami_Fadidatou
Salami_FadidatouLv4

I do think his age is a problem too considering what's he's been up to

Mohamud_Abdullahi
Mohamud_AbdullahiLv1

xp

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RelhakLv12

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