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CestMoi
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2020-01-04 08:26

The story development is utterly slow. The character is too flawed and unrelatable. If you made him a bit smarter this could work out. Without his cheat I can see him dying from tripping on a branch. Yeah i know this comes with character development. But from what I see he lacks self preservation. Buying useless skills instead of something that could help him adapt to his situation and new found power. He doest even have a sense of urgency. When all he cares about is internet and hot springs thats clearly a bad sign. The only good part is your superb writing and fast update speed.

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