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Xeno_ElementalLv131yr
2023-05-20 16:02

Okay, writing quality, there is NO breaks. There is so much information that it gives you a headache. Separate it a bit and make it digestible in bits. Stability of updates is fine, I don't mind. Story development is basically overshadowed by the mass amount of words that pile onto you. Character design, is almost the same thing, but the description on some characters are hard to understand because it's not simplified enough. World background... I don't need to say anything else now do I? Still, keep trucking.

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(Sry but this is my first review so no flame pls) Writing Quality 5/5 -No major noticeable grammar errors, sentences flow nicely and the entire progression doesn't feel like a headache to read, there might be some errors but small enough to not really care about Stability of Updates 3/5 -I started reading this about a month ago and there have only been 2 updates so far and looking at the previous chapter updates it seems the author only writes when he has time so going into this you should realize there might only be 2 chapters one month and 10 the next its not really stable and depends on the authors time which in no way is bad but you should realize it isn't gonna be consistently updated. Story 5/5 -So far the plot hasn't gone that far its still kinda early game, but from what I've read I liked it. Volume 1 is honestly amazing, there are no noticeable things that tilted me. Volume 2 wasn't as good as 1 but that has to mainly have to do with characters but the overall plot direction and how it's progressing is still strong so no real problems. Characters 4/5 -Main character is exactly as you see in the tags he's cold, calculative, and manipulative. He also has the feel of a real person a little in the sense of how he feels alone which I could personally relate to some of his thoughts, The only real thing I can nitpick at is how in volume 2 he seems softer mainly due to the girl he butlering for. (IDK if butlering is a word but whatever) Side characters-Most are forgettable no real characters that I care for other than the MC and maybe the girl he's watching over, but that mainly has to do with short chapters and not enough time to get to know them but most of them I can't even remember. Worldbuilding 4/5 -the only reason it isn't 5 is that the plot is still in the early game so we dont know the whole world or have a grand picture so there is a possibility to mess up, but overall I'm really interested and I wanna know what's around and build a picture of it in my mind. Overall I think this is a solid read and you should read it only real downside is the update frequency, but I loved it it also gave me some My Death Flags Show No Sign of Ending and a little bit of The Villainous Daughter’s Butler I Raised Her to be Very Cute.

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