Review Detail of MisterE05 in Boudoir Glamour Inc.

In general, I think that the story is at a tremendous start. But you need to take it in to consideration, that the paragraphs you write on Notes/Docs/Computer etc etc. In some cases won't appear the same here on Webnovel, Order-wise. You need to give each chapter a better view, watch punctuations carefully so you can connect 3-4 sentences in to a paragraph. Normally this isn't a big problem, but it will make the Chapters neat and in some aspects more readable. The chapters could use more words too, aim for 1.5k