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ProudMonkey
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2019-12-13 20:05

To All the Readers, Please write your reviews so that i can get an idea on how do you see my Novel. And please rate it as well, so we can have our rating. Sincerely Yours, Proud Monkey.

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RuxoXQueen
RuxoXQueenLv12

Good story but while is Shin a little weak. He got train by a mafia who got destory by the special force. So when Shin enter the games should he appy them like when he fight...etc.

ProudMonkey
ProudMonkeyAuthor

Thanks for the comment. He is still a beginner in the game, so he doesn't discovered a lot about it. Just wait for him explore more about it.

DeVoided
DeVoidedLv15

Harem or no?

DarkApolonir
DarkApolonirLv6

Shin will rrally not be with his big sis?

Ashandar
AshandarLv15

Only one real problem And that is the 4th wall breaks that you have it would be one thing if you had a dead pool type story or character that was similar but you don't so all it does is break immersion

RuxoXQueen:Good story but while is Shin a little weak. He got train by a mafia who got destory by the special force. So when Shin enter the games should he appy them like when he fight...etc.
EnderPL
EnderPLLv6

Are you one of those who delete bad reviews?

ProudMonkey
ProudMonkeyAuthor

Nah! I let it as it is. I know that I have some shortcomings and I don't deny it. I'm quite new in this industry after all. So just say what you want. And I will accept it fully.

EnderPL:Are you one of those who delete bad reviews?
EnderPL
EnderPLLv6

Sooo I like the story but if I’m to give my score then you would go really low in the grammar department. The other thing is did he modify his character when he enters the game or does he look like he did. Is it even possible to modify it. Is there no penalty for dying or for attacking/pk-ing? That’s for now but I like the story so far.

ProudMonkey:Nah! I let it as it is. I know that I have some shortcomings and I don't deny it. I'm quite new in this industry after all. So just say what you want. And I will accept it fully.
ProudMonkey
ProudMonkeyAuthor

I admit that I'm quite weak in terms of grammar. And the MC didn't modify his character, same goes for others. All they did is to get an IGN and select a race. The rest will be set as it is. Each race have different starting stats and he happened to fell in Human Race starting point. And there is a penalty for dying and attacking, its just that I didn't give an emphasis into it and just give a slight explanation in previous chaps. As for the MC, he didn't get any penalties from attacking others because of the special effect of his mask. That's all and thanks.

EnderPL:Sooo I like the story but if I’m to give my score then you would go really low in the grammar department. The other thing is did he modify his character when he enters the game or does he look like he did. Is it even possible to modify it. Is there no penalty for dying or for attacking/pk-ing? That’s for now but I like the story so far.
ProudMonkey
ProudMonkeyAuthor

I admit that I'm quite weak in terms of grammar. And the MC didn't modify his character, same goes for others. All they did is to get an IGN and select a race. The rest will be set as it is. Each race have different starting stats and he happened to fell in Human Race starting point. And there is a penalty for dying and attacking, its just that I didn't give an emphasis into it and just give a slight explanation in previous chaps. As for the MC, he didn't get any penalties from attacking others because of the special effect of his mask. That's all and thanks.

EnderPL:Sooo I like the story but if I’m to give my score then you would go really low in the grammar department. The other thing is did he modify his character when he enters the game or does he look like he did. Is it even possible to modify it. Is there no penalty for dying or for attacking/pk-ing? That’s for now but I like the story so far.
Degenerate_Panda
Degenerate_PandaLv15

ProudMonkey, can you tell me what the tragedy tag is for?

ProudMonkey
ProudMonkeyAuthor

I guess I can't. Sorry

Degenerate_Panda:ProudMonkey, can you tell me what the tragedy tag is for?
Nuon
NuonLv10

Im starting to read now, i hope it doesnt disappoint because i loveee novels about video-games/vrmmorpg! I just hope he isnt weak ;_;

UmbraHaven
UmbraHavenLv15

Sweet Home Alabama! xD jokes

DarkApolonir:Shin will rrally not be with his big sis?
8Eight
8EightLv3

grammar is really bad, its a little better than mtl, since the words are correct, there is just alot missing in between. you can still read it, but its not exactly pleasant

8Eight
8EightLv3

after writing this, i read your comment, which is alot better compared to the actual chapters, potentially do a revisits/potential editor?

Dis77
Dis77Lv12

Yo author your summary is filled with bad grammar. I am guessing the story is the same. Get an editor.

Neigh007
Neigh007Lv5

Is the Tragedy here strong (Death of Familie/Lover/Friends) has the Novel Harem?

Ahriman02
Ahriman02Lv13

hey bro you really should get an editor who will fix up your grammar the story interesting so far an i see you get a good amount of view but there would probably be a lot more people who would read this if you tidied up the grammar a bit

Jonathan_Wozniak
Jonathan_WozniakLv14

I like the story or novel so far. I would like to keep reading this of at least a thousand chapters not sure what your plans are for the novel. Keep on making the story. Just don’t quit on the story.

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InfiniteZer0
InfiniteZer0Lv14

This is a weird split with martial art and video games. The reason it is weird is that this is mainly a martial arts book with the mc telling of his video game experience (I exaggerate, but it is how it feels). This is very unusual because usually novels will make it the other way around. Don't be fooled by the description, this is not a video game focused book with a martial arts background, martial arts is the focus. As for the book out of the game, it is fairly descent. A bit lacking in describing stages of cultivation, but is more or less fine. The is some evil underground threat looming over that is not really expanded on. The thing I find weird is there seem to only be genius cultivators from the young people and no one older has special talents or abilities and are only strong due to time, but the out of game story is not half bad. As for the video game portion, I will start by saying I usually like video game light novels, but this one seems plain sloppy. Very little detain is given about the game mechanics and the insanely high numbers with no context annoys me. It usually is along the line of: the mc just took 738,000 damage at level 30 and he is fine even though at level 1 he had 1000 hp. There is nothing concrete about the game, except the skills which have a description but have a relatively long cool down (say 20 second) but he uses every attack. I don't know about you, but even I can run 10 meters and attack 3 times in 20 seconds (I would not likely hit but I could do it), but he uses this skill to attack an opponent attacks 3 times, killing the opponent and uses the same skill again immediately after. It really makes the mc feel underwhelming when you think, even a lazy unathletic person like me could do that... What is so special about that.

daniwalh
daniwalhLv15

I normally don't drop novels this fast, but I got too pissed off. I don't know about everyone else, but personally I started this novel partially because I saw that the MC was raised as a killer after being kidnapped by a dark organisation. I normally gravitate to these stories because it means the MC is ruthless and broken which makes for interesting reading (not raised to be assassin, but Supreme Magus is a great example of broken character). But then there is a timeskip and they are now teenagers. These two prodigies, who have grown up competing and sharpening each other every day get bullied by their slightly older sister who we have never had any indication is strong. Very annoying, but I accepted it and chalked it up to a staple of the genre, despite how infuriating it is. But then he gets attacked by a girl, randomly and with no provocation. So what happens. Does this MC who was raised as a weapon until the age of 9 fight back? Does the MC, who had to survive by fighting both male and female kids his own age to survive retaliate? No, he fucking doesn't. He takes it. Then she attacks him again. Is he finally provoked, and pushed to reveal a little of his killer instinct? Hell no. He doesn't like hitting women. Then when she attacks him again and pushes him to fight, and he wins, does he show any kind of ruthlessness? No he politely says goodbye, and says she can find him any time. This, in simple terms is a complete betrayal of who he is as a character, and it's a complete betrayal of the readers who have invested in the character. So dropped.

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