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Lordyken
LordykenLv124yr
2020-04-23 01:22

Sorry dropping the novel at this point when i read about the children i thought you were adding depth to the novel, letting him have a family of sorts to develop the backstory. I ignored all the obvious plot armor because the overall story was interesting enough to continue and wonder about what will happen next However now i realised his family just turned out to be convinenr sidekicks to go slay the monster king, i feel this novel is very superficial and shallow, the way everything just falls into place for him is very boring and also kinda disgusting to read about. Finally why is he even a imp or demon when most of the time you make him out to be some kind of mr. nice guy...... Did u think a nice demonic imp is interesting? I think at the start it was interesting to see his reaction but later on he turns into such a bland generic human that i feel confused for you the author, u have forgotten the demonic part or monster part of your own main character. So this are the 2 main complaints i have about this novel. Thank you for all the interesting chapters so far.

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DiceVR
DiceVRAuthor

Fair enough, you can drop this novel whenever you want, just wanted to say that in no way have I forgotten the Demon/Monster part of the MC. He simply isn't a regular monster, but he's not some 'Mr. nice guy' either. Around the chapters where you dropped it, I can definitely see where you're coming from, but in future chapters, the maybe more 'monstrous' part is shown again

Lordyken
LordykenLv12

Im glad u can see where i am coming from, hopefully in future i can pick up your novel again.... Again thanks for the story so far, its been interesting

DiceVR:Fair enough, you can drop this novel whenever you want, just wanted to say that in no way have I forgotten the Demon/Monster part of the MC. He simply isn't a regular monster, but he's not some 'Mr. nice guy' either. Around the chapters where you dropped it, I can definitely see where you're coming from, but in future chapters, the maybe more 'monstrous' part is shown again
DiceVR
DiceVRAuthor

If you want to decide if you want to pick it up again or not, I think reading the next 10-20 chapters might be a good choice, since at that point will Eiro become a little more... monstrous again. (Or even just glancing over chapter 109 should give you a good idea of what I'm talking about) And thanks for reading the story so far, even if you dropped it now :D

Lordyken:Im glad u can see where i am coming from, hopefully in future i can pick up your novel again.... Again thanks for the story so far, its been interesting
SuicidalSkeletin
SuicidalSkeletinLv2

I honestly quite missed the whole part about him being a "nice guy" in general I find your analysis of his character to be quite lacking

SuicidalSkeletin
SuicidalSkeletinLv2

Although I can tell that some parts were too easy for the protagonist, especially when rescuing the children, but how else is that supposed to happen in a single night?

IncubusLord
IncubusLordLv1

So how evil is he on a scale from 1 to 10?

DiceVR:Fair enough, you can drop this novel whenever you want, just wanted to say that in no way have I forgotten the Demon/Monster part of the MC. He simply isn't a regular monster, but he's not some 'Mr. nice guy' either. Around the chapters where you dropped it, I can definitely see where you're coming from, but in future chapters, the maybe more 'monstrous' part is shown again
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