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ZeroLinaMent
ZeroLinaMentLv44yr
2020-04-24 07:17

The overall structure of this novel is great It completely let's you visualize the World. You will grow attach to the character as they all have their certain personality. The aren't empty with emotions. The plot is such a great concept as it allow you to see multiple path of how the story will proceed. But the MC is op it's kinda bugging me i hope to see him struggle in the state where he is hopeless and devastated.

Otherworld Adventure

xxAlter
4.7
3 Chs

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KingGeorg
KingGeorgLv14

I have read now over a hundred chapters to this point and here are some reasons why I think this could be something for you as well. 1) You like transmigration stories with the proven concept of a not weak Mc having an adventure in another world, that you’ve read a thousand times but still can’t get enough off..(like myself) 2) You DON‘T want your Mc to be a teenager in heat yet having some girls around him only only one true future wife. 3) Potentially some kingdom building in the later chapters. 4)Not to many grammar or spelling errors per chapter. To my knowledge you will spot some here or there but they aren’t that often. Make sure you mark them and inform the author, because he earned it writing for free for us. And here some points I’d like to point out that I think the author could improve. 1) Stop using Japanese terminology in an English story. This is sloppy writing in my opinion and also asks for trouble when your reader isn’t familiar with it. 2) Over use of something-cum-something. I know this isn’t necessarily wrong but to my knowledge so far this is sparely used . „cum“ is Latin for with and hence you will find this normally with special terminology like „summa cum laude“. So this begs the question why not simply using with instead of cum and secondly it seems to me unnecessary in most cases. If you are in a bar or caffe you don’t need to know that they also have a dance floor ... caffe-cum- dance floor or better a caffe with dance floor. 3) Some characters could have more depth to them, especially those around the Mc. But I’m aware that this is easier said than done, and also would require even more time in an good paced story. I only want to note that it seems obvious that besides the main protagonists not much to the inner or outer conflicts of his closest allies is actually known. It’s a bit like scratching on the su***ce and I think it’s lost potential... potentially ;)

4yr

LegolasGreenleaf
LegolasGreenleafLv15

I am caught up at around chapter 250 just for reference sake on how far I read which is up to date at this moment. First the world is interesting and has plenty to be explored which is a big plus as it helps keep me motivated to keep reading when stories have an interesting world where I am constantly wanting to learn more of the world the mc is in. The characters are enjoyable especially the mc family and close friends. Though I will say some dislike some characters or character traits which is understandable as everyone has their own taste. The stuff that I saw some not like was the mc being dense on love(though at least it made sense cause of age/upbringing) which can be frustrating but this novel is one of the few that actually develops the mc where they grow as right now the mc is way more aware and is maturing well. I mostly just dislike an mc who would remain dense when they are an ***** or it lasts too long which doesn’t happen here. The love interest is violent at times at the start like pinching the mc or wanting to hit him which it wasn’t enough where I had issues with it as they are kids so it made sense as they would have a hard time expressing themselves but it may also be because I am used to similar stuff from anime. Though again character development happens so these negative traits for some decrease later on as they grow out of them. I really like authors who do character development at a good enough pace like showing gradual changes versus some novels I like that will unfortunately keep a dense mc for example and never get rid of it just to continue a joke which has long since got old. The story overall was just fun to read and from my experience the quality is above average vs other novels here and in my opinion one of my favorites. Also probably one of the biggest things is I like the author’s attitude on how they always come off as being friendly and takes criticism well which is something that is needed if one wants to improve. There isn’t much criticism in this review as I just enjoyed the read so far and the flaws are all things that is fixed with editing which don’t occur hardly at all. If I have criticism I mostly write it when I notice it at the comments unless it is bad enough where I can remember it then it goes into the review. Good start especially for the first book and I look forward to future chapters along with how the story grows.

4yr
xxAlter
xxAlterAuthor

Okay, a shameless review from the author xD This is my first ever book, so let me explain a bit about it. Well, this is a transmigration novel, but it's not just a group or individual transmigration. Instead it's a global one. The novel is about the whole population of Earth being transmigrated into Alterna. The story is centered around Cecil, our MC. He's a child who was taught the martial ways since childhood so he doesn't have any *normal* common sense due to his upbringing. He's no airhead, but he really lacks in ability to read the mood. He'll also say whatever's on his mind without thinking sometimes. There's going to be some romance in later chapters between him and our female lead. Somewhere along the way, the story will also be told through our female lead's perspective and also Cecil's family's perspective. Anyway, that's enough from me. Please do enjoy this book and follow me as we journey together with Cecil and his friends in the magical world of Alterna. 😁 P.S = if you're wondering whether this novel will have a potential harem... For now no.. Cuz personally I'm no fan of harem xD P.S.S = if you like the book, do leave a review hehe 😄

5yr
majorfury666
majorfury666Lv11

The story was getting damn good until the female support character started being annoying. It became hard to read then. Reading a good story with bad characters is depressing. Also, the author feels the need to have info dumps every few chapters. These aren't as bad as the female character but it just adds un-needed fluff to an otherwise damn good story.

4yr
zhaderx
zhaderxLv4

I rilly good story! It’s great to read and it will piss you of so ment times! Read it! If you don’t like it stop. If you are unsure then give it a shot, the author takes criticism well and mends the story a little bit depending of the feed back! And if you like it don’t stop because you think it’s getting worse, by the time you are thinking of quitting again it’s to late cuz something new takes your interest in the story😁 Btw there is 2 FL now... just decided threw a pull.. not a fan but both girls are great characters but I like Lulu more~

4yr
Sevennamed
SevennamedLv12

This story is: info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, info dump, annoying girl, etc....

4yr
Acortal
AcortalLv5

a lot of fun and i want to see where the story will go next,the author and the story have both improved a lot since the beginning so i have high expectations

4yr
x7thHeaven
x7thHeavenLv1

The writing quality is good, there's little to no grammar errors. The story development seems slow, but at least the chapter releases are steady. At least there was some thought put into the characters so far. Even the pet has a personality. The world setting is good so far. I'm expecting more from this story.

5yr
Windreader8675
Windreader8675Lv5

Nice plot, nice details. Easy to follow and love the family. Story somewhat realistic at the beginning, especially loved the mother and grandmother. Recommended to add to your library, nice book to read when going somewhere [just as I'm now, reading while going to school]

4yr
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